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Open Poetry #43

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norunnin
Member

since 2008-10-16

Posts 71

0 posted 2008-11-13 02:36 AM

hello star
i thougt i was alone
but there you are
shine on me from afar

pleas shine on my heart
starlight so far light
give me a new start
renew my blackened heart
take me apart and
take me by my hand

walk with me
keep me company
on this lonely journey
????????
(its not finished im gonna sleep on it)

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

1 posted 2008-11-13 05:15 PM

I am sure it will turn out the way you want it to

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2008-11-15 09:37 AM

You are on a great journey with this piece.
I keep stopping back to see how you have finished it.

You should, you know?!!
Excellent beginning.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

3 posted 2008-11-15 11:15 PM

Good start. I'll look forward to see the finished piece.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Improving
New Member

since 2008-11-08

Posts 8

4 posted 2008-11-15 11:55 PM

Wow this is quite good. Dont give up on it, it will come to you.

norunnin
Member

since 2008-10-16

Posts 71

5 posted 2008-12-15 10:20 PM

to find me

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