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shortsleeves
Member

since 2008-10-19

Posts 125
Franklin Tennessee

0 posted 2008-11-10 03:35 PM

Dancing Particles
Samba To The Beat
Of Creation

Inquisitive Minds
Move In Shadows
As Consciousness
Shapes Itself

Mystical Friendships
Bond In Cyberspace
Where Memories
Become The
Now

I Kiss A Mirror
And
My Reflection
Shines Within You

Slowing We
Twist And Turn
With The Grace
Of
Multiplicity

Intertwined In
An Ocean
Of Appreciation

We Bathe
In
Synchronicity
www.shortsleeves.net http://halmanogue.blogspot.com/

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (11-19-2008 03:01 PM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-11-10 06:46 PM

Welcome again, dear Hal!

It's a masterful write and so totally after my heart.

Simply enchanting!

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2008-11-11 12:08 PM

Shortsleeves, I enjoyed your very sensitive, multi-facetted poem fashioned into a beautiful philosophical/aesthetic blend.

I was fascinated by your use of capitalisation of each word. After examining the two words that weren't capitalised to see if there was some significance, I came to the conclusion that it was a minor slip.

I particularly loved the way you sandwiched the poem in dance, with the second reference developed past the first.

- Owl

americangothic
Junior Member

since 2008-11-11

Posts 45

3 posted 2008-11-11 12:17 PM

a well written piece that flowed nicely

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2008-11-11 12:42 PM

Wonderful!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2008-11-19 07:18 AM

quote:
I Kiss A Mirror
And
My Reflection
Shines Within You

Enjoyed reading this again. Such depth and beauty!

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

shortsleeves
Member

since 2008-10-19

Posts 125
Franklin Tennessee

6 posted 2008-11-19 08:43 AM

Thank you Owl for your thoughts. Yes the two words are corrected. I appreciate your awareness.

Thank you Americangothic, Sunshine and Margherita for visting and adding your thoughts.

Love,
Hal

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2008-11-19 04:06 PM

"Mystical Friendships
Bond In Cyberspace
Where Memories
Become The
Now"

I like the idea behind this...it was all nicely written...

shortsleeves
Member

since 2008-10-19

Posts 125
Franklin Tennessee

8 posted 2008-11-19 05:01 PM

Thank you Steavenr. I appreciate your thoughts.
Hal

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2008-11-19 08:03 PM

Honestly, Hal, there are so many quotable ~ and memorable ~ lines in this poem, that I find I must save it to my trove of poetic treasures!

I appreciate your expansive mind and how you express those thoughts so poetically!

Love & Light,
Linda

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