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We Will Miss Her
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We Will Miss Her |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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We will miss her. Her fingers trembled as she tried to untangle chains that she bought on the Home Shopping Channel years ago before her neck lost its swan look. That was when her marriage still had hope, when she could look at her husband and dream of cruises, Hawaii, and a romantic retirement. She filed for divorce three days ago and now she’s packing up decades of a life she grew to hate after he smashed her dreams under sharp sarcasm. Who wants my chains, she asks as she holds them out Untangled, but as tarnished as the look In her eyes. One of us takes them, we don’t care who. Another child holds a dented roasting pan as if it holds all those misplaced dreams almost forgotten. Baubles cover her bed as generations of women hover and touch her lightly, loving her, but hating her taste in jewelry. Yet, loving it too because it is her and is part of her and all that will be left of her to hold. We will stack her bake ware in our kitchens and touch the icons of her – the souvenirs that attest to the fact that she was here; and that she once had the dreams of a young woman and the dreams of a neglected woman. Once she dreamed of being loved with passion. She leaves on the midnight flight tonight and we will wave and blow kisses that are already lonely without her. We will put on our brave faces and look festive in pins and rings and chains and beads that are not of our generation – and we will love her. And we will miss her. - Alison |
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Freely_expressing Member
since 2008-10-16
Posts 69NSW, Australia |
I'm not sure I understand the meaning behind this poem, a tad confusing..but I'm only young. About a friend or someone close leaving? (or passing away i wasn't sure but thought not). Hope I'm not being insensitive. Great write despite my confusion. Very emotive, conveys the feeling of sadness or loss quite vividly. Thx for the honesty of your emotion! - ben |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ben, I doubt that the confusion exists because you are young. It probably mirrors the confusion in my head. Yes, you are right. It's about an old woman who has given up on a loveless marriage and is leaving her home. She can't take the things she has accumulated through her life - so she is handing them out to family members. They don't share her taste, but they love her and cherish any connection to her. The things she leaves behind become icons that bring her to their lives. Thank you for reading and thank you for your honesty. Alison |
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Freely_expressing Member
since 2008-10-16
Posts 69NSW, Australia |
Thank you for that  the explanation adds clarity and serves to further enhance the power of your poem. And I'm glad I wasn't alone in my confusion too.  Keep expressing your emotions so beautifully! It's this very expression that enables us to deal with such loss. - ben |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thanks for checking back in and letting me know that the clarification helped, Ben. I'll look at it again tomorrow ... Oh, and welcome to PiP. You are adding a lot to it already. Alison |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oh my Ali-girl.... I read and I cry... this is so beautifully expressed xx love RDB xx Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Alison, this is a wonderful write my friend, so vivid and expressive, it brought so many pictures to my mind and thoughts that really should not be there. Take care my friend and write on. Rick |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
A sad part of life~~ well done M |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
Hi Alison, such and sad tale; but one that happens quite frequently I'm sure. ooxx Marti __________________________ |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Wonderful depiction...wouldn't change a thing. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
it's too early to cry this hard... my God Alison...  |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
This is so sad. I know just how it feels to have to leave things that mean so much to you behind. I, too, had to do that. It is so heartbreaking. Not to mention the broken marriage. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Alison - For a moment I thought you were writing about me! Yes, I've been there, done that, and although your write is indeed a sad one I hope that like me she is much happier for having made the move. There comes a time in life when we just have to love ourselves - especially when the dreams are shattered. You write with a lot of sensitivity and insight and it is a pleasure to read you. Love Helen |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is such a powerful, enigmatic write, filled with melancholy and sprinkled with the sad fact that a life can be measured in things that we accumulate, rather in joys we've shared...simply beautiful "Untangled, but as tarnished as the look In her eyes." I just love that line. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Alison, you did a fine job with this poem, very poignant, and any woman who might have been there, contemplates going there, or has known someone who has walked these steps, were to know or have known all of the looks and acts and pain placed out above... Poem well done, m'dear. Heart well broken. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This intensely poignant write increases my today's melancholic mood, but it is life and eventually the moment of leaving behind everything arrives ... Very sensitive poem, dear Alison! Love, Margherita |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A sad but wonderful and touching poem, Alison. So personal and true to life. Ida |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"and that she once had the dreams of a young woman and the dreams of a neglected woman. Once she dreamed of being loved with passion" that really hit home for me...what do you do when you share so much with a person, love, children, history..and then find you must leave? You give up more than a marriage. You give up growing old with the person you shared those children with, you give up sharing the joy of grandchildren... yes, I know this in my bones. Wonderful job expressing the grief that never goes away. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
RDB, Thank you. It almost hurts to read the responses to this poem. Everything hurts right now. Love, Ali - Rick, Thank you. I write because I have to. It's the only way that I can express what is inside me right now. Thank you for reading and understanding and offering your thoughts in friendship. Alison - Thank you, Maureen. Yes, it's sad - and sometimes not sad. Alison - Marti, It seems like it does happen frequently. Thank you so much for the comments that you have shared with me - I value you a lot as a friend and a reader and writer of poetry. Hugs, Alison - Thank you, amusemi. I won't change it. I don't have the heart to hardly read it again, let alone change it. Alison - Hugs to you, beautiful SEA. Thank you. Love, Alison - Oklahoma Rose, I admire your courage to do what you had to do, no matter how painful it may have been. Thank you for sharing and reading. Alison - Helen, I think that the good of all this is she will have time to love herself and remember what a good woman she is. Thank you for sharing and maybe I was writing about you too. This seems to have struck a memory in many. You are in my heart. Alison - Steaven, You pulled out my favorite line too. Thank you for reading my poetry and sharing your thoughts about it. Alison - Sunshine, Thank you. You know, I was doing fine answering these comments until I got to yours. I am crying and I don't know why except you are such a kind person. Thank you for everything that you have done to help me here in PiP. Love, Alison - Margherita, I have missed you. Thank you for taking the time to write that you have been here reading. I worry about those I care about when I don't see you for too long. Hugs and love you, Alison - Ida, Thank you, my friend. You are special and I look for your comments. You are very kind and generous to me. Love, Alison - Susan, Thank you so much - I am sorry that you can indentify with this poem. Wouldn't it be wonderful if all the women who read it just looked puzzled and said, "Huh?" Love, Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Once she dreamed of being loved with passion. And we feel the disintegration of those dreams through your words. Heart-wrenching... and fantastic!! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
lovely -Juju |
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