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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2008-11-02 10:56 PM


you smiled a little too heavily
for this particular situation
but it didn't weigh either of us down

I laughed with you and you laughed at me
because you make me a little funnier
than I usually tend to be


you ladled a little extra happiness
and a pinch of sex
into my people soup

I thanked you politely,
handed you your iced tea,
and sat down next to you.

______________
The Sadie Series.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

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amusemi
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A State of Disarray
1 posted 2008-11-02 11:24 PM


Sounds like a nice moment to me.  Glad you had it.  Great write...
viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
2 posted 2008-11-03 01:22 AM


Thanks! If I write enough of this series to make a book maybe I'll sell it... not. It'd never get published, and people don't like poems about girls, unless they are the girl receiving them. They also have to be half-decent then, which these aren't.  DANGIT. It sure would be nice to have a source of income though...

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

steavenr
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3 posted 2008-11-03 08:13 AM


"I laughed with you and you laughed at me
because you make me a little funnier
than I usually tend to be"

describes what seems to be common in close relationships very well...I, for one, look forward to more in this great series

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
4 posted 2008-11-03 09:52 AM


Thanks Steve! You'll be hearing much more.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Janette
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5 posted 2008-11-03 11:35 AM


"... ladled a little extra happiness"

I could clearly see this scene happening and it did make me smile.

Enjoyed

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
6 posted 2008-11-03 12:07 PM


Thanks much, I'm glad I got some visualizations stirred up.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

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