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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-10-24 07:09 AM



we set our watches to be misconnected
as is seemed our agendas had grown different
from the other places we had placed them

I didn't mind you in your levi thigh highs
and the fishnet ballet overalls at all
when your eyes were closed around mine

and you came just because you liked to come
not because you thought you could fix me
although I did tell you how, but you didn't want to

and there would always be excuses for that
it is part of the proper side scenerio
which is why I never dated billboards before

or took candy from mothers of another's babies


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1 posted 2008-10-24 11:27 AM


you can trick or treat with me anytime D
Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2008-10-24 11:39 AM


Ms Suesea it would be several hours well spent...thanks hon
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3 posted 2008-10-24 11:46 AM


This just connected with me.  A really fun thought provoking read you have served here, I think I shall have another serving and read it, again.

Enjoyed!

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2008-10-24 01:02 PM


Ms chi-townJ. It is cool to see you back rubbing pens again. Missed you. Thanks.
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5 posted 2008-10-24 03:05 PM


clever title, interesting write
Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2008-10-24 04:07 PM


thanks steavenr...one of the special places in the middle of ahhhh sheeeet...
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7 posted 2008-10-24 05:31 PM


i really enjoyed reading your words..each stanza caught me and pulled me on to the next - definitely something to be digested over time!(great title   )
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2008-10-24 05:57 PM


Thanks TSU and welcome to the blue zoo


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9 posted 2008-10-24 06:45 PM


enjoyed
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10 posted 2008-10-25 03:54 AM


Mr Daark... enjoyed this lovely penning from you ...   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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11 posted 2008-10-25 04:57 AM


a very mysterious (and astute ) portrait of the new generation.
Very apt (and communicative phrases):
"watches...misconnected" and "not because you thought you could fix me." I enjoyed this immensely.

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2008-10-25 06:38 AM


ms van,thanks


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ms bruce....thanks


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ms cali..thanks for looking deeper..

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