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tabme
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since 2008-10-03
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Mississippi

0 posted 2008-10-21 01:16 PM


I sit staring beneath your gaze,

wondering 'what if?'.

instead of 'not if.',

both eloquent of their nature,

postponements of the postponed,

skewed on the plane below,

questions formed from those versed in,

the answers held in truth,

but unlocked to those in a sense,

a common sense that routes forth,

thought and action,

symbiotic in their interactions,

of circular motion,

providing surfaces of grainy confirmation,

for a slacker,

from the back row.
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enjoy.  I finished it too soon but I got shizzle to do.

© Copyright 2008 Thomas Bennett - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2008-10-24 07:47 PM


I liked the flow of this.
Interesting journey through your words.

tabme
Junior Member
since 2008-10-03
Posts 37
Mississippi
2 posted 2008-10-24 07:53 PM


Thanks.  I was really proud of this one and was wondering if anyone liked it. XD
Janette
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3 posted 2008-10-27 12:17 PM


" ... questions formed from those versed in, ...
providing surfaces of grainy confirmation, ..."

Great lines!

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"for a slacker,

from the back row."

Your ending made me think of the following quote I have read:
"In terms of their outlook on the future, slackers regard tomorrow with a studied cynicism or . . . don't even conceive of one" Julie Caniglia.

You did a good job conceiving this write. *wink*

Enjoyed!

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

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