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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2008-10-17 07:39 PM





The past few days,
I've watched a Hunter's Moon
swell full on my horizon,
blood red
with dying embers of Summer's heat.
This Moon has warmed me every time
rising from the Bay,
just out of touch  
fire stretching long upon the river,
lighting up the way that drives me home.
Tonight
a flight of geese down from the North
crossed its face,
booked into rooms upon the river,
vagabonds pausing for the night
before heading out at dawn to find their beacon in the South.
They'll wake me in the morning
calling loudly
so as not to leave a sleepy friend behind in dreams,
and perhaps to mock wet hunters
dew chilled and lurking
blood lusting for slow stragglers,
but that is all for morning.
Tonight,
as I watched their grace in slicing through a dusky sky,
wings just barely rippling the river's clinging mist,
I wondered when our snows would fly.  
This knowing Moon
slipping through low wispy clouds
smiled me a private whisper,
"Not yet," it said,
"not yet my friend,
...but soon."

©2008 by icebox

© Copyright 2008 icebox - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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1 posted 2008-10-17 09:22 PM


Loving this, and keeping it.
~thank you Mr C~
namaste

Bill Charles
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2 posted 2008-10-17 10:20 PM


icebox - the wonderment before winter's snow. Enjoyed the read...

BC

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3 posted 2008-10-17 10:54 PM


did i ever tell you that i loved your poetry?
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4 posted 2008-10-17 11:51 PM


icebox,

You are enjoying the geese that left my home to head south.  We have your winter and are taking care of it until it, too, chooses to migrate into your area.

What a wonderful poem.  Thank you.

Alison

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5 posted 2008-10-18 02:28 AM


There is nothing more beautiful than geese
in flight in an autumn sky except maybe this poem with it's lovely imagery and deep
message.
                            Ida

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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6 posted 2008-10-18 04:36 AM


wonderful imagery here!! I love your writings Mr C!   love RDB xx

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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7 posted 2008-10-18 06:30 AM


Oh, dear Charly, thank you for sharing your wonderful visions with us, in such a masterful way.

I am in awe and me too I will keep this.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

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8 posted 2008-10-19 12:02 PM


This is like fine brush strokes sweeping across the page,
and blending every single word into perfection.

Fabulous writing icebox, a true poetic masterpiece!!!

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9 posted 2008-10-19 12:39 PM


liked it
icebox
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10 posted 2008-10-20 09:18 AM


Thank you all for your time and for the kindness of your comments.
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11 posted 2008-10-21 10:53 PM


a quiet and private conversation with the moon...what a cool thought...nice write
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12 posted 2008-10-22 06:25 AM


I watched that moon the other night and saw the same~~ and even the geese along a large pond nearby.

This is a favorite to be kept.

M

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13 posted 2008-10-22 02:39 PM


Charly - your words took me there and it was a wonderful sight.  Thank you always for your poetry.

Helen

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14 posted 2008-10-25 12:46 PM


"fire stretching long upon the river, ...

booked into rooms upon the river, ...

so as not to leave a sleepy friend behind in dreams, ... '

I so enjoyed the imagery you penned here.

Wow!

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

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15 posted 2008-10-25 01:16 PM


I like this one!!!!
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16 posted 2008-10-25 09:02 PM


Love the Imagery indeed!


ARCTIC WIND

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17 posted 2008-11-06 01:24 PM


As I read your response to midnitesun's poem, I enjoyed its poetic beauty... To read the expanded version here is a real treat! *S*
Susan Caldwell
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18 posted 2008-11-06 02:29 PM


You wrapped my much frazzled brain in the warmth of the moon.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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19 posted 2008-11-07 06:49 PM


superb 'penning'!

v. serious and sustained applause!!

Bill Charles
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20 posted 2008-11-07 07:29 PM


icebox - came back and read this again. I alwasy did love the moon in one way or another, and love to write about it in various ways. You captured it well here...

BC

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21 posted 2008-11-08 12:25 PM


What a lovely vision.  Very nicely done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Martie
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22 posted 2011-09-05 12:27 PM


Charly....I'm sorry that I missed this before, but understand even more, this magic sound in the sky, now that I live in a place where I hear it often.  
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