Dazzling Daisy (an attempted ode)

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Open Poetry #43

Dazzling Daisy (an attempted ode)

kanashe
Member

since 2008-05-21

Posts 59
america

0 posted 2008-10-16 11:15 AM

dear dazzling daisy with your golden pedals so bright,
can you feel the icy brezze while danceing lithely in the fading sunlight?
will you grow any taller chasing colorful butterflies or are you perfect,
lovely daisy,
are you just right?
how soft your pretty pedals feel pressed between the pale skin of my fingertips,
like and expensive silk, imported from the best. do you mind pretty flower if i take you home?
for the winter winds have suddenly begun to blow.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2008-10-17 03:30 PM

kanashe - I'm sure those daisy's are feeling the gentle words of this write...

BC

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-10-17 03:36 PM

Yo dear Kanashe,

This is fairly good. Of course, I think it would be better in Standard English Punctuation and capitalization. I always say that, and always will.

Check out some of John Keats Odes, he was an expert on odes.

Bobby

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