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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2008-10-15 03:54 PM

A yellow orchard cascades over the hills
where the sun slants against the wind
and leans into the fading clouds
free falling into white ivory.

Like sweet cream
stirs the shoreline blue
and distant white caps
sweep the sand dunes
airbrushed in rieslings
brazen and bronzed.

I am reminded of sea glass
and the pastel shade of time
seeping into the sunset
like spun twilight
you were the elusive pearl
in a cove of dreams
warm and smooth in the sunlight.

I keep your smile in clear view
wrapped around the edges of my heart
and I miss you in unforeseen moments
captured in whispers of a calypso
rolling on waves of endless motion
set in powder blue and violet jewels.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2008-10-15 04:24 PM

beautiful

and i LOVEEEEEEE the new pic

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2008-10-15 04:40 PM

quote:
I am reminded of sea glass
and the pastel shade of time
seeping into the sunset
like spun twilight
you were the elusive pearl
in a cove of dreams
warm and smooth in the sunlight.

Dear Lori, this is exceptional poetic language!

When you wrote this you were on an inspirational high.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2008-10-15 08:47 PM

Thank you ladies~
I appreciate your nice replies very much.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2008-10-15 10:42 PM

I like all of this poem, but I love these lines --

quote:
and I miss you in unforeseen moments
captured in whispers of a calypso

Thank you for sharing this poem.

A

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2008-10-15 11:01 PM

I agree with everyone else,
you have a way with
words in poetic beauty

EXCELLENT!!!

Happy Fall
ARCTIC WIND

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

6 posted 2008-10-16 05:54 AM

Breathtakingly beautiful, Blues. Your poetry just does it for me.
Ida

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2008-10-16 01:54 PM

Wow, Bluesy gal! You haven't lost your touch or your looks I might add. Lovely new picture but your words ...

... captured my heart! Wonderful poem!

Hugs
Helen

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2008-10-16 03:15 PM

You guys make me so happy. Your comments encourage me in every way, and I thank each of you, sincerely.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2008-10-16 07:28 PM

Pure poetry, bluesy! Spun 'magic' I'd say.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2008-10-17 02:47 AM

A pleasure to read...James

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2008-10-17 03:19 PM

I keep your smile in clear view
wrapped around the edges of my heart
and I miss you in unforeseen moments
captured in whispers of a calypso
rolling on waves of endless motion

Reading the above made me sigh... in understanding, in my own missing... and in delight at reading you again!

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

12 posted 2008-10-17 03:38 PM

BluesSerenade - wow, great write. While reading I see the words come to life.. Very nice...

BC

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2008-10-18 10:44 AM

Thank you, thank you everybody.
I wish you all a whole lotta love!!!

ken206573
Member

since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

14 posted 2008-10-18 05:43 PM

i love the poem. it reminds me of the ocean within the twilight. truly my mind, heart, and soul was taken into a far distanced journey

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

15 posted 2008-10-18 11:40 PM

Ken~~ I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem.
Thanks for looking me up, I appreciate it very much.

~Welcome to the blue pages~

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

16 posted 2008-10-19 08:52 PM

This poem sings with joy.
Very beautiful like you
blondie

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

17 posted 2008-10-19 09:29 PM

this is so cool...couldn't find just one line to highlight...each built excellence upon the next...like getting to the malt in a Friday night shake...better and better with each sip

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

18 posted 2008-10-20 09:07 AM

Who are you calling blondie, blondie??

I'm so glad you stopped by, thank you.

Cool, like a shake? I like that.
Thanks steaven

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

19 posted 2008-10-20 11:40 AM

Wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!!

...and sea glass always brings mixed memories for me, but this time only good ones!

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

20 posted 2008-10-20 08:32 PM

Thanks icebox~ *hug*

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

21 posted 2008-10-21 05:27 PM

A yellow orchard cascades over the hills
where the sun slants against the wind
and leans into the fading clouds
free falling into white ivory.
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I loved the images in the entire piece and of course with images of shore and sea I couldn't resist. The above verse however left some very beautiful thoughts and pictures in my mind that and left with a good impact. Well done

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

22 posted 2008-10-21 07:16 PM

Absolutely superb cascading imagery!

Wonderful ‘write’!

I am especially fond of the beginning:

“A yellow orchard cascades over the hills
where the sun slants against the wind
and leans into the fading clouds
free falling into white ivory.”

V. serious and long-sustained applause
for this grand-fine ‘penning’!

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

23 posted 2008-11-12 07:02 PM

Simply spectacular!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

24 posted 2008-11-12 08:32 PM

Blues Seranade, that is such a goooood poem,
Top accolades for this one my friend, take a bow. Have a great day.

Lindsay

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