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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2008-10-10 07:37 AM


It’s a backward woman just like me
who seeks to be a gypsy queen
and twirl and whirl unmindful of
the flames of enduring love.

She wants to forward go and stay
in the field of all she is today
open to the stars, the sky,
and clothed in her love of you.

But a backward woman can’t discern
how drapes a love o’er human form
and whether it would suit or not
the curves that were but now are not.

It’s a backward woman just like me
who wants to live amongst the stars
and yet be on the ground entwined
in the tendrils of true love.

But backward women just like me
can’t foresee how this can be
when he who loves remains behind  
and holds the reins tight, tighter still,
to forestall her wish to twirl and whirl.

Backward woman, tut-tut-tut,
‘tis just a case of sheer back luck
that forces on one such as her
the flames of enduring love!  

Helen / 10 October 2008    

[This message has been edited by Honeybunch (10-10-2008 09:24 AM).]

© Copyright 2008 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
1 posted 2008-10-10 07:39 AM


wow!! my lovely Helen.. this is amazing! I really enjoyed your beautiful words!

love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
2 posted 2008-10-10 07:42 AM


backward woman just like me
can’t foresee how this can be
when he who loves remains behind  
and holds the reins tight, tighter still,
to forestall her wish to twirl and whirl.
liked the word compostion here throughout your expressive poem

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
3 posted 2008-10-10 09:26 AM


Thanks Roniece and inkedgoddess!  I greatly appreciate your comments - just as well backward women can still read.  

Helen

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2008-10-13 06:13 PM


Enjoyed the Write Helen!!!!


ARCTIC WIND

Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
5 posted 2008-10-13 10:34 PM


Honeybunch - nice write about the backward woman...

BC

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2008-10-14 02:21 AM


Hi Arctic Wind.  Good to "see" you here.  Thanks for the read.

BC - Thank you.  So glad you enjoyed.  I guess "backward" is just one of the aspects that contributes to the whole.

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