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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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the drifting of your eyes as your reach for higher things letting the hem be just a him that you don't wonder about when you untie the silk there from your cautioned edges and hurry slowly nonchalant as if only occasionally intentional and then you lean on your elbows again and hold your shoulders just that way as you read lines between dreams by the flicker of the pen wondering how every thing tastes that you have never been close to and would you mind the windows really if strangers were beyond them only looking at where you were going _______________ daark |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D, my friend - You sing these poetry songs so well. The words are almost elusive as I read them. A |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
and then you lean on your elbows again and hold your shoulders just that way as you read lines between dreams by the flicker of the pen ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ hey mister, you write like a dream yourself.... between dreams of course!! It's all so wonderfully vivid!! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY interesting 'write'! and what a grand-fine line!!: "as you read lines between dreams by the flicker of the pen" excellent!! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"by the flicker of the pen" great turn of the phrase...another great write |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thank you babe ______________ ms bluezy, you always smile me lady!! thank you ________________ 2ndhand' thank you so much for the touch ___________________ steavenr, humble thanks amigo |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
my hem always lifts for you with or without your eyes of dark |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms inky...my eyes are fingers of wind thanks babe |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I am always amazed at the subtleness you show in describing an attitude. Such intriguing visuals, dear D.! Love, Margherita  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Mar. Thank you lady. |
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