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kanashe
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0 posted 2008-09-25 04:31 PM


startled into wakefulness
by the bright and shining sun
a soft hum fills my sleepy ears
beating like a drum
your snoring is like a foggy lullaby
singing me swiftly back to sleep
i smile a genuine smile
i keep only for you
i whisper softly in the yellow light
to your unconsious form snuggled next to me
three soft word
"i love you"

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2008-09-25 06:30 PM


This is sweet.
Welcome to Passions

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2008-09-25 07:46 PM


Enjoyed...James
Robert E. Jordan
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3 posted 2008-09-25 07:51 PM


Kanashe,

The thought behind this poem is very good.

Bobby

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Gaia
4 posted 2008-09-25 09:28 PM


LOL, I've never heard snoring described that way. Nice write, kanashe.
steavenr
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5 posted 2008-09-25 11:34 PM


"i smile a genuine smile
i keep only for you"

I know that smile...'tis a good feeling...welcome to PiP

Margherita
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6 posted 2008-09-26 09:54 AM


How tender and touching! When even the snoring becomes music to our ears, then it surely is LOVE.

A little gem, that brings smiles.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

kanashe
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7 posted 2008-10-01 02:50 PM


thank u all so much for the wonderful comments and the welcomes^^

-ashe

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