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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-09-25 08:35 AM




Apartments

The lower apartment is so much like
the upper one. The dark wood on the doors,
the dusty brass plates, the curiosity
to see what is behind the other one.

On the balconies the wet underclothes
fly the notion of life, not too rich, not
too poor. The curtained quarrels and then
avid make ups at night are hardly hushed.

The staircase sometimes sees them together.
A short hello and off they go down to earth.
He may not have known the name of the man
had they not come to take his body. © 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

clever talks delay friendship!

© Copyright 2008 poddar kushal - All Rights Reserved
Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 posted 2008-09-25 09:51 AM


Yo Poddarku,

This is very descriptive of life in any city.

I don't know about you, but I would never want to live anywhere else.

It's people, real live people.

Bobby

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2008-09-25 12:47 PM


You rendered this reality very well, dear Ku! We can't be close to all the neighbours, as we all need our own privacy, but it's a kind of freedom embedded in humanity which I like better than a single home ...
You make me think of elderly people in our apartment house who might well feel rather lonely ...
I think I will call my friend Gertrud who lives alone, thank you for the soft reminder.

Love and hugs, dear Poet.
Margherita

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2008-09-25 01:08 PM


Kushal, this was so sensitively real - the last 2 lines are very sad - and awake us not to wait too long - as kind Margherita's reaction shows.  

- Owl

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