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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
I'm so sick and tired of this never ending fire as it's sending the pain straight to my fictitious attire It's ridiculous, I always come off as inconspicuous up until my seriousness causes me to become furious my mind becomes delirious, I see nothing but white body's ready to fight, for the wrong reasons or right blind to emotion, as this commotion causes explosions erosion of judgment causes deficient compulsions heading straight through I utter words of confusion blind rage fusions with suicidal illusions choices become impaired, as I dare to continue chalk around my victims as I stand in the venue I laugh and walk in the darkness, broken and cold bold enough to spit on the face of the shackles that hold |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Maybe I'm wrong, but I think if you put a beat to it and some old music from a lost artist, you could have a RAP song. Well done. |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
Thanks, one of my many styles is RAPoetry  I have many other styles I can do, just this particular style I enjoy the most. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
definitely a good song; i enjoyed the rhymes... regards yann |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I agree - this reads very well and I really appreciate how you have cleaned up your spelling. It makes your work so much more fun to read. It's good to see you still posting and writing. Alison |
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