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Open Poetry #43

Hiding in my Own World

xxxFallingSixFeetxxx
Junior Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 13

0 posted 2008-09-23 10:04 PM

Away with the world
Gone from the pain
Secluded to myself
Stranded in the rain

Whispering in the shadows
With no one to hear
Lost in my own world
But at least they know me here

My passion is subsiding
And my spirit is subdued
Forced me in my world to hide
For I am infamously viewed

[This message has been edited by xxxFallingSixFeetxxx (09-25-2008 11:11 AM).]

xxxFallingSixFeetxxx
Junior Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 13

1 posted 2008-09-23 10:09 PM

"forced me in my old world to hide"
third line of third stanza

xTr3m3sT
Member

since 2008-03-03

Posts 415

2 posted 2008-09-23 10:12 PM

Sometimes I wish I can exist in a reality that I can manipulate and control....

great poem.

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

3 posted 2008-09-24 05:52 PM

xxx, you can edit your poem within 24 hours of submitting it. the middle icon on top of your poem page is for editing.
I liked you write.

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