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Open Poetry #43
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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2008-09-22 04:01 PM


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Light
Moves slowly
Across the wall
The curtains white
Prim and still

Sun rising
On autumn
In the east
A snowy moon
In the western sky

A single sparrow
Chirping under
Wooden eaves
Alone again
Another day

Sometimes it hurts
To look into your eyes
Now so far away


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secondhanddreampoet
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1 posted 2008-09-22 06:19 PM


VERY fine!

I am especially fond of the initial impressionistic imagery:

"Light
Moves slowly
Across the wall
The curtains white
Prim and still

Sun rising
On autumn
In the east
A snowy moon
In the western sky"

v. serious applause!!

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