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WTBAKELAR
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0 posted 2008-09-18 05:21 PM


Take your turn

Mind spinning,
waiting,
hands wet with the sticky clam of flat ale and sweat.  
Will they listen?,
Am I worth their time?
In a room, smoky and humming with the gentle tap of fingers on tables,
slow rhythm as one,
urgent for more, or not.
One dim light on the bare feet standing alone on stage..
Take your turn,  poet.  



© Copyright 2008 Wm. Tracey Bakelar - All Rights Reserved
2islander2
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1 posted 2008-09-18 05:27 PM


enjoyed it, the healthy modesty and the nice writing...Thanks for the poem.

yann

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Gaia
2 posted 2008-09-18 07:25 PM


That scene imagery almost had my feet sweating!
Nice write.

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3 posted 2008-09-19 01:43 PM


I lack the words to describe rightly how really good this one is.  Applause for the one taking the stage...very well done.
WTBAKELAR
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4 posted 2008-09-19 02:40 PM


Thank you all for the very kind words.  I honestly am not used to this type of writing, but a poem I read on this site made me think of this very seen.  I could here it in my head, the tapping. the hum. It was surreal.
Marchmadness
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5 posted 2008-09-21 12:51 PM


This is so good it made me nervous.
                              Ida

OwlSA
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6 posted 2008-09-21 02:54 AM


Yes, take your turn, Tracey, for you are a poet and you had us all listening, and waiting for more.

- Owl

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