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Eternal Devotion |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA 
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Eternal Devotion Devotion for his sweetheart, He stood close by her side, And held her hand through Good and bad, His love he would never hide, When she gave him children, He upheld his part, And held her hand through Good and bad, And loved them with all his heart, With all the years together, He doted on his bride, And held her hand through Good and bad, Just to be close by her side, Then her body weekened, He pushed her to be strong, And held her hand through Good and bad, But knew they wouldn’t have long, Devotion for his sweetheart, He loved this woman so, And held her hand the day she died, He could not let her go, Now by her grave he whispers, When I get to the other side, I’ll hold your hand through Eternity, Forever you’ll be my bride. Wm. Tracey Bakelar 2008 [This message has been edited by WTBAKELAR (09-15-2008 05:37 PM).] |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
Never have I seen devotion so perfectly described. I am sure that this will bring a tear to many an eye. Such a pleasure to read especially noting the hope expressed in the last stanza. Do not go gentle into that good night. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo WTBAKELAR, The thought is there, however, watch your spelling. Try "doted" for "doded", and "weakened" for "weekend". Bobby |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I renamed it Eternal Devotion. It seems to fit. |
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