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Tim
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0 posted 2008-09-14 03:56 PM



Remembered years of laughs and tears,
soft kiss upon the brow,
Whispered voice in love's rejoice,
to thee I do avow,
Mine heart's adore, forevermore,
shall you, dear, ever be,
My Terpsichore, my paramour,
heart's key that sets me free
To sail the sky, to heavens fly,
to hear the muses sing,
Sweet songs of love, from worlds above,
such joys to me you bring,
So many years of hopes and fears,
of futures yet to see,
And through it all, mine heart's enthrall,
you stand right next to me,
We stand as one, our lives' not done,
our journey not yet through,
So many years of laughs and tears,
to yet say, I love you.
To hold you tight, throughout the night,
to dance 'cross heaven's floor,
My dearest wife, you are my life,
my love, forevermore.

© Copyright 2008 Tim - All Rights Reserved
Marchmadness
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1 posted 2008-09-14 04:15 PM


Lovely sentiments, Tim.
                   Ida

Lady Ayla
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2 posted 2008-09-14 04:53 PM


I found it really sweet.
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3 posted 2008-09-15 12:59 PM


More couples would stay together if they would remember why they married.  I hope this is not just for the one you love but for all who love.  
Very tender.  Beautiful.

TheAnonDavid
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4 posted 2008-09-15 01:24 PM


Whilst I appreciate all the sentiments expressed in the comments - with which I totally agree - I was struck by the high level of technical poetical proficiency shown here.
This is an excellent read for both content and form.
The poet's request for no critique prevents my elaborating.

[This message has been edited by TheAnonDavid (09-15-2008 04:39 PM).]

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5 posted 2008-09-15 04:31 PM


Beautifully done Tim, and you can bet your evening will be blessed

    

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6 posted 2008-09-22 08:19 PM


Tim,

I look for your poetry and am always so happy when I find it.  This is beautiful.

Alison

LindsayP
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7 posted 2008-09-22 09:07 PM



Tim that is a beautiful heart touching poem

so tender and romantic, one of your very best. Thank you.

Lindsay

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