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WTBAKELAR
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0 posted 2008-09-11 05:46 PM



When I met you girl it happened to me,
Feelings of new love ran through me,
I really hoped you'd let me be the one,

I could take away the painful memories,
Of the ones who left you lonely,
You'd see that it's alright to need someone.

We could be happy,
And make our dreams come true,
If you'd only, let me fall in love with you.

Will you open up your heart again,
And let somebody new come in,
Together we could share a love that's real.

Give me just a chance and you will see,
Than you're the only one for me,
I'm sure you'll understand the way I feel.

We could be happy,
And make our dreams come true,
If you'd only, let me fall in love with you.

Let me, oh let me,
Fall in love with you!

© Copyright 2008 Wm. Tracey Bakelar - All Rights Reserved
TheAnonDavid
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1 posted 2008-09-11 05:59 PM


Maybe it's me but this makes me think that you are writing the words of a pop song here.
Set it to music - and off you go

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Dylan Thomas

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2 posted 2008-09-12 06:55 AM


Opening up again is not always that easy.

M

HopeS
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3 posted 2008-09-12 12:00 PM


If she has been hurt before , maybe it will take time to gain your trust

Hope

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4 posted 2008-09-12 05:37 PM


I agree with the others,  the feel of the
beat makes me think of pop music.. Love is
certainly an appropriate avenue for you to
express your feelings....Now, let's see who
reads them...

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5 posted 2008-09-12 05:43 PM


A lovely song, it looks like you have already fallen in love with her and that's all right So may she let you hope to be requited.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

WTBAKELAR
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6 posted 2008-09-15 04:15 PM


Married now for 12 wonderful years,  She let me.
WTBAKELAR
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7 posted 2008-09-19 03:36 PM


moving poem to library.  Thank you for letting me share my work.
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8 posted 2009-02-24 10:56 AM


I enjoy the romantic heart in you  
WTBAKELAR
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9 posted 2009-02-24 01:56 PM


Thanks, Sue,   I really like knowing I have that special effect on certain people.

You always make me feel like my work is important.

Love always,  WT.

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