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slowing snow |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Slowing snow, sleeping sluice, the poet slacks, slap him… Otherwise his muse would never come back. |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
There is some humorous onomatopoeia here (as well as a tongue twister). Besides, where would we be without our muses? Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Dylan Thomas [This message has been edited by TheAnonDavid (09-11-2008 03:06 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Yann, you surely are not the one who slacks! Enjoyed this one, it is stimulating ... Love, Margherita  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you David for your nice comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Margherita for your nice comment... yann |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, I love this, Yann. It is such fun - starting from such a beautiful poetic image and ending with the shock of the smack and the explanation! - Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Owl, this poem is a bit strange, cause I didn't know where I was going this time....Usually when I write a poem I have the idea of the poem....There I didn't have, I just write Slow snow and that's all, then I looked in my dictionary to make onomatopeus and find an ending...Thank you for your generous comment... regards yann |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Well, it worked! Very clever it was too, Yann. - Owl |
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