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Open Poetry #43

Hope-less

A Beautiful Disaster
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since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2008-09-08 01:01 PM

Deceptive freedom. Honest lies.
A charming, yet so dreadful guise.
Forgotten memories. Two hearts
Are in my chest, both torn apart.
Strong weakness of a wilted rose.
My two reflections, one disclosed.
A shadow of changing shapes.
The sorrow of different shades.
A bleeding wrist of strangers'faith.
A crystal tear on no one's face.

Odd soulless hearts in mystic frames,
You have no voices, know no shame!
Just when you're dumb, your words are true.
I'm hopeless. Well. But who are you??
You're nothingness behind green eyes,
Mistakes that never happen twice.
You're just a riddle for a day
To figure out - and stay away
From all this simply perfect mess,
Where I am hope, and you - are less.

SarBear
Member

since 2003-06-05

Posts 205
Massachusetts

1 posted 2008-09-09 08:43 AM

I love the language in this poem. Very well written. My favorite is the last line.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2008-09-09 05:55 PM

"You're just a riddle for a day
To figure out - and stay away
From all this simply perfect mess,
Where I am hope, and you - are less. "

my favorite, too

M

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