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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-09-07 08:33 AM



The cabin

He has to ask at the cross road.
So many years.
The last august-visit at this place
had been when his
father was a part of it.
Their big catch is
a family myth we cherish.
Smoky sun down
walks towards the desolate cabin.
A creek is
flowing down the time.

She looks up.
There is the promised rainbow,
taut like a fishing-rod.
And  
somewhere there
at the eternity
is a big catch.

clever talks delay friendship!

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Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-09-07 10:00 AM


Again, my dear Ku, with your masterful words you painted a scenery that captivates the reader deeply.


Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
2 posted 2008-09-07 03:39 PM


A lovely, nostalgic piece. Ku.
                          Ida

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2008-09-07 07:42 PM


I love what you said in this poem.  Even more, I love what you didn't say, and how you didn't say it.  

- Owl

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2008-09-08 03:13 PM


This is too beautiful for its lines and its between-the-lines not to be bumped up to the top again.

- Owl

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2008-09-08 03:31 PM


Beautifully constructed to bring the images to life and the way it flowed just added more enjoyment to the read.  Well done.
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