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Open Poetry #43

Please tell me what you think of this poem!

allmo
New Member

since 2008-09-06

Posts 6
California, USA

0 posted 2008-09-06 06:38 AM

You

I don't think you will ever fully understand
How you've touched my life and made me who I am

I don't think you could ever know just how truly special you are
That even on the darkest days, you are my brightest star

I don't think you will ever comprehend how you've made my dreams come true
Or how you've opened my heart to love and the wonders that you do

You've allowed me to experience something very hard to find
Unconditional love that exists in my body soul and mind

I don't think you could ever feel all the love I have to give
And I'm sure you'll never realize you've been my will to live

You are an amazing person and without you where would I be
Having you in my life completes every part of me

allmo

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-09-06 06:49 AM

Welcome to Pip, dear allmo!

Your first post is a lovely, classical love declaration, filled with a sense of gratitude, which is a sign of your sensitivity and beauty of heart. Do not doubt too much your beloved one's ability to realize the depth of your feelings ...

And it is also very well written.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2008-09-06 01:15 PM

Allmo this a vibrant declaration of love, I really enjoyed your poem and it touched me...

regards

yann

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2008-09-06 05:19 PM

Its nice to appreciate someone...James

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2008-09-08 01:38 AM

Hi Kat,

Welcome to PiP.

I think that your poem is going to make (or has made) someone very happy to be loved by you.

Alison

sklagurl17
Junior Member

since 2008-09-08

Posts 43
nc.

5 posted 2008-09-08 02:42 AM

This poem has a brillant choice of words.
It makes me wonder how real love actually is.
good job.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

6 posted 2008-09-08 11:25 AM

Welcome to PIP!! I believe if you have shown that special someone this piece then you have taken another step to showing them how deep your love is. Well done.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2008-09-08 05:33 PM

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" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

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