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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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Fish A handful of river I gather. Bring it to my eyes and see a small fish, caught inside. It flips its red fin in despair. Eyes that are not capable to express fear or betray emotions, just get broader, bigger, sadder. It is surprised. While relieving the little life, I think if somebody would let me go where I could breathe better! clever talks delay friendship! [This message has been edited by poddarku (09-06-2008 12:21 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, dearest Ku!! Every living creature can tug at our heartstrings no doubt and then there comes a wonderful Poet like you and moves us to compassion ... I think alike and I can identify with that little fish and express my gratitude for letting me live ... as for you, you deserve the purest air to breathe in freedom and joy. Who has the power to decide whether you will breathe better or not ... only the divine Creator of all things and being His child you will always live, breathing or not... love and hugs Margherita  |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
I just love all of your poems. Exquisite. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
You are a gentle soul. Your poetry is deep and light all at the same time. Thank you for sharing the beauty you write. Hugs BonBon  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you from a little fish with a red fin and big sad eyes and a grateful heart. There is an island where peace can be found as evening harmony settles in. As poddarku-exquisite as this poem is, the last two lines need tiny changes. “Breath” is a noun and you need the verb, “breathe” with an e on the end in the last line; “would” should be “could”; and I think you mean “if only somebody would”. Thus the last two lines should read, “I think if only somebody would let me go/where I could breathe better!” Just as I know you won’t be offended, I also won’t be offended if you don’t change it. It is a very beautiful, sensitive poem anyway. I keep reading it, and don't want to stop. If only there were millions more Kushals in the world, it would be a much happier place and we probably wouldn’t have global warming. However, I shouldn’t be so greedy. We have one Kushal and he is in PIP, and a friend of mine, and I am very grateful for that indeed. - Owl |
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MsMelissaMae Junior Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 26Indianola, Iowa |
what a beautiful and gentle read! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely poem, Ku. Thank you on behalf of the fish. Ida |
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