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SkaaDee
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0 posted 2008-08-29 10:47 PM


a female cardinal with mate
grasped the garden fence long enough
to rob me of sound and breath.
frozen
I cherished the seconds
until their startled egress and then returned
to my journal as my wife closed
the gate.

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Dark Stranger
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1 posted 2008-08-30 06:07 AM


skaadee, enjoyed this sparse comparing of them and us...
OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2008-08-30 01:03 PM


I am still "robbed of sound and breath/frozen" in the ecstasy of the moment, and don't want to "return to my journal".  I know this moment often in my indigenous forest garden, but knowing it, enhances the ecstasy.  Thank you for sparkling dewdrop.

- Owl

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2008-08-30 01:33 PM


Great moments and comparisons often lead to good inspire.  Glad you shared as I enjoyed being able to recall some of these myself as I read.
Marchmadness
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So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2008-08-31 12:34 PM


I like this, Skaadee.
                 Ida

SkaaDee
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5 posted 2008-08-31 01:01 AM


thanks for the comments everyone.

I thought there was a certain irony how we are awed by life in nature but don't give enough attention to our loved ones.

OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa
6 posted 2008-08-31 07:17 AM


Yes, I see that in your poem now - and you are so right!  I learnt something new.  Thank you.

- Owl

Margherita
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Eternity
7 posted 2008-08-31 07:31 AM


Beautiful message of awareness.

Love,
Margherita

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