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Rick
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0 posted 2008-08-29 07:30 AM



Life is never all that sweet
Though moments they may bring us joy
That thought of something yet to reap
Does hold what others might destroy

Life is such a game of wit
Of patience that injures such test
And though we often want to quit
The living will not let us rest

So onward we do push up hill
So then the distant light to see
Through test of courage and of will
The demon tends to let us be

To sing a song of truth and tune
Does free the mind of jungle game
But moment it does end too soon
And life again remains the same

So what are we but wishful souls?
All wanting what’s believed so sweet
All reaching for our inner goals
Then finding that the truth we meet

So I consol more with my heart
And lies I know I try to mend
But years have been and played their part
So what’s this life; but just pretend

© Copyright 2008 Rick Van Weenen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-08-29 07:44 AM


I think it is poetry like yours.  Life is filled with hope and times of bittersweet and times of doubt.  It's all these things - and I have read all these things in your poems.  I think that is one reason that I find you so good.

A

Rick
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2 posted 2008-08-29 08:50 AM


Dear Alison, thank you my friend for your reply, always great to get each one of them, have a wonderful day and take care.

Rick

martiniat8
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3 posted 2008-08-29 10:57 AM


well spoken, beautiful words, but grim outlook, nothing is pretend unless you make it so. Seek and enjoy all and who that is real.
Rick
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4 posted 2008-08-29 07:01 PM


Martiniat8

Lovely to get your reply my friend, it is a bit of a grim outlook I know, but really how many of us get close to the dream and the life we hope to get, there are glimpses of it from time to time, but this life is the true reality while in our minds we pretend the way things might be. Often expectations are more than our quota I suppose. Generally I am a very positive person, this was just a feeling during the day, nice you found the time to visit and reply, thank you so much.

Sincerely
Rick


ladylisa
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5 posted 2008-08-30 03:39 PM


loved this piece.  life is just a movie played out, the script has already been written and we are just actors.  lis
Gumpy
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6 posted 2008-08-30 04:01 PM


a very well written  poem.
It does so make one think.
Rarely is it what we expect or turn out the way we thought.

nice write.
Gumpy

How is it that after your heart is ripped out, you feel so much?

Rick
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7 posted 2008-08-30 07:08 PM


Dear Lis, my thoughts exactly my friend, a part to play as fate does lead. Thank you so much for your reply, it was great.

Good to see you here Grumpy, we can dream of what the day might be, but more than often it turns out the opposite, thank you for your reply my friend, appreciated.

Sincerely
Rick

Marchmadness
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8 posted 2008-08-31 12:27 PM


Hi Rick, Sometimes life is a bit grim. We poets write what we feel and I think you did just that here.
                              Ida

LindsayP
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9 posted 2008-08-31 12:48 PM



Rick that really doesn't sound like you,
A man with so many blessings, good health,

everyone's respect, a lovely family and an
ability to write beauitiful words. Take a

good deep look in the mirror my friend and you will be pleased with what youi see.

Lindsay

Rick
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10 posted 2008-08-31 04:16 AM


Dear Ida and Lindsay, I am fine folks, these words just came to my head and I had to share with someone, don't worry about rock solid Rick, he is ok. Take care of yourselves, this life is one to be enjoyed hey. lol.

Rick

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