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five_finger_death_punch08
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since 2008-08-28
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0 posted 2008-08-28 03:44 PM


All I want is to see you smile
To see the desperation in your eyes disappear
Even if it's not me who takes the pain away
I can cope with rejection
And treat the infection
If you'd just smile

Your voice sounds distant and troubled
It hurts that you aren't always satisfied
When I'm laying next to you
But put a smile on your face
And how could I complain
Cause I know you've tried to figure it all out
Time and time again it never makes sense
Now if I'm not enough to get you through
I'll still be waiting here with you
Just hoping that someone will put a smile on your face

It's true I'd rather hurt with you
Than hear you sounding miserable
I'm oblivious to the situation
Even though I've tried countless times
To get inside your head
To figure out what makes you smile
Because there's nothing else to live for
A bond so tight, emotion's contagious
I can't comprehend why nothing could save us
But one legitimate smile

And even if it's not me who takes the pain away
I can cope with rejection
And treat the infection
If you'd just smile

And I've got imperfections
That end in obsession
But I'd let it all go
Cause I want you to know

Nothing makes me feel the same
When I see you smile


August 28th Thursday 2008
Emily Shives


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
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1 posted 2008-08-29 05:23 AM


Welcome, dear Emily, to Pip! I love the title of your first entry, but I can't say the same of your login name ...

quote:
Now if I'm not enough to get you through
I'll still be waiting here with you
Just hoping that someone will put a smile on your face



Your poem is well written and I enjoyed reading it. To love someone like this seems very noble and selfless. But remember that you have the right of living in a sunny relationship. Without smiles the greatest flower of love is bound to wither ...

Maybe he would "wake up" if you tiptoed silently out of his surroundings ... gaining the awareness of what you are for him.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

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