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CrazyHorse
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since 2008-08-23
Posts 31
New-Brunswick, Canada

0 posted 2008-08-27 10:58 PM


so guys this is the true story of how judy garland and terry crooper made it big together told from the caretakers' point of view...even though they were in different rooms

enjoy...and seek the humor


I got a face that most women don't mind
Got less things ahead of me than I've left behind
Don't mean to scare you, but she's starin' at me from across the room
She moves closer to me, says "I'm not much more than glitter and dust"
I says "Don't worry, ma'am, I'm not expecting much"
Someplace in the distance, the band carries a novelty tune

Standing at the bottom of the barrel and I can't stand the view
I'm a litte self-centered, but baby, so are you

You know, I hate to lend and I hate even more to give
Sometimes you need to kill the things you want to let live
This is the last waltz, you best move on and leave behind what's yours

Now this town is more like a stone drenched in blood
I'd like to see her again, maybe this time she'll do me some good
But I'd like to see her speak less of herself
This room has far too much standing space
Let's take it out back, but let's not go to my place
Self-indulgence means more to me than myself

There's still place in the backroom, but why don't we move this downstairs
I've seen much too little of her to really care

There's a million things I'd like to do to you
But I'm short on time, yes, I think we're through
This is the last waltz, take your things and see yourself to the door

Don't you look at me with those pearly ghost eyes
Got more to do than add up your sweet-talking jive
There's more women out there looking for a sucker to pin
Gonna go downtown, search out another or two
But chances are I'll just end up with you
I'm searching salvation in a woman who doesn't care where my heart has been

Just 'cause there's water under the bridge, don't mean there's no time for a quick dip
When it comes to her, you know, she's less hit than miss

I been trying so hard to pray all my sins away
But since you're already here, you might as well stay
This is the last waltz, and I'm a sucker for this tale

Well I'm a novelty act, no, I'm not much more than that
But she'll believe anything I'll say or hold back
She listens to every word like the sun burns for the sea
I said "I love you my dear, but time's what I lack
Why don't we do this right here, this deal's pretty much in the bag"
That's when she let go of my pocket, and her room's the next room I did see

She said "Your hair's too long and your mouth's never closed"
I said "The more it's open, babe, the more things you'll know"

Hush now, baby, don't make a sound
No sense in taking this layin' down
This is the last waltz, and I've had it up to here with this place

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-08-29 05:34 AM


I think this is quite entertaining and well written. And considering the circumstances, besides the humorous aspects, there is the melancholy of what "A last waltz" implies.

Very good!

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

CrazyHorse
Junior Member
since 2008-08-23
Posts 31
New-Brunswick, Canada
2 posted 2008-08-29 02:25 PM


i'm not sure i understand your reply,to be honnest haha...i appologize for the odd intro i gave..i was a bit out of it when i posted that poem. i'd take it off, but i guess edits need to be made within 24 hours of the post haha

i appreciate the comments immensely. i'm sorry i haven't had the chance to comment on many of yours,although i have taken the time to browse through the forums and comment on those that caught my eye. i've been working pretty steady these last few weeks and it takes up lots of my time. but i'm goin back to school next week,so i'll have more time to look through each of everyone's writings!

thanks again for taking time to comment on my writings.

-CrazyHorse

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