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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
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india

0 posted 2008-08-27 02:19 PM



Green wrap

He takes her there. His hands of protection are
behind her back, lightly, like holding a fledgling.
She closes her eyes. This is the world of her wish.
The skylarks are flying in their busy schedule
wisely drafted. The road of red dirt meanders into
green fields. Stops there, becomes green, loses character,
peters out in oblivion. He adjusted
her crutches. Smiles sparkle in her eyes cornered in
dark, deep black hole of sickness. This is not the
place she has her birth, alike any child destined
to go back wherefrom it has come, only a bit
earlier. Still it is green like her birth-village.
An early sunset is taking the stage of sphere.
Green fields move inside the two lovers’ eyes. Assuring.  
A green world wraps the ever slipping moments from
their lives… a world according to the lady’s last wish.

clever talks delay friendship!

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-08-28 04:52 AM


quote:
Green wrap

He takes her there. His hands of protection are
behind her back, lightly, like holding a fledgling.
She closes her eyes. This is the world of her wish.
The skylarks are flying in their busy schedule
wisely drafted. The road of red dirt meanders into
green fields. Stops there, becomes green, loses character,
peters out in oblivion. He adjusted
her crutches. Smiles sparkle in her eyes cornered in
dark, deep black hole of sickness. This is not the
place she has her birth, alike any child destined
to go back wherefrom it has come, only a bit
earlier. Still it is green like her birth-village.
An early sunset is taking the stage of sphere.
Green fields move inside the two lovers’ eyes. Assuring.  
A green world wraps the ever slipping moments from
their lives… a world according to the lady’s last wish.



Oh, dearest Ku, this wonderful write is perfection and it will forever remain impressed in my mind ...and I will keep it of course.

It is indeed our heart's wish to return home before leaving for HOME. You said it with immense sensitivity and beauty. When to our human hearts it seems too early to go, it is even more heartwrenching.

And through tears I am reminded of my own wish to return to my mountains once again before my time comes ...

But I do hope to stay a little longer down here ... my daughter just made me happy with the news that her third baby is on the way ...

But you know, where there is love, there is no separation ... ever .

Love and hugs, dear Poet.
Margherita


"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2008-08-28 12:16 PM


Kushal, you really have outdone yourself (again)!  Your poetry is unbelievably mature for one so young.  This is very, very sad, but simultaneously deeply beautiful and happy in the most important of ways.

Margherita's response was (as always) very compassionate and beautiful.

- Owl

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
3 posted 2008-08-28 01:47 PM


This is such a lovely, sensitive poem, Ku.
Thank you for sharing your heart with us.
                                 Ida

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2008-08-31 07:14 AM


This is so beautiful that it needs to go the top again.  Bump!

- Owl

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
5 posted 2008-08-31 04:43 PM


Diana my friend you did what I intended to do too ... it is kind of a must read I would say. So I send it up again.

Love and hugs, dear Ku Poet!

Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

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