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Am I not? Oh ok.
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kudanesh Member
since 2007-12-01
Posts 135Peterborough,England |
People say I'm not the one I'm not their star I'm not their sun the day will come when I have won the perfect love of some one but for now I must survive I must work hard I must not skive I will wait for love to arrive I fight for my love to stay alive there is not room for me to hate love hasn't com early so it will be late I've wiped my past a clean new slate for my true love ill have to wait love is not in the first you see I thought she was, it wasn't to be she was my flower can I be the bee but I got turned down no honey for me carrying on like nothing was said trying to ignore the thoughts in my head if things was different where would it have lead would I be watching he sleep in my bed I know what it feel like holding this pain thousands of other feel exactly the same they might not love you but what's in a name their morals still stand under somebody's clame one say your hand will fill out that glove your feeling will be as pure as a dove this will rain from heavens above that finally you have found true love |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Andrew~ ONLY because you seek constructive critique do I offer it~ PLEASE take the time ... to make the time to correct your spelling in your posts~ The effort would result in a more receptive audience for your thoughts~ If your weakness is spelling ... try the online dictionary at www.dictionary.com I'll come back to read this one when you've taken the time to correct the spelling and grammar usage mistakes~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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kudanesh Member
since 2007-12-01
Posts 135Peterborough,England |
I will say that I am sorry for my grammer and spelling. but errm... I do not spell so well. do try i hope this repost is better. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Andrew, it is nice to read you again and you have done a good job. You do well to continue to trust, love will arrive for you maybe just when you least expect it. Love your reflections. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Andrew~ Taking the time to make a lot of corrections makes this a much easier read~ Thank you for having done them~ Love comes when we least expect it to come~ May yours come and surround your heart with joy~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've taught me a new word, Andrew. Skive. quote: Thank you for that. Can you clarify for me how you meant it to be used in your poem, please? Right now my mind isn't pulling in the use to the meaning and your poem. Thanks! |
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kudanesh Member
since 2007-12-01
Posts 135Peterborough,England |
Well I am glad to have help you to discover this word the trouble that I have is though I can use a spell check on a computer I can't tell if it is the correct spelling of the word I would have liked to have used. I ment to use the word skive as laze about bunk off from doing any thing. I am dislexic (I think thats how you spell it )so when 3-4 word that are similer in front of me and I dont no the meaning then I can't tell the correct spelling. thank you for you post all the same kudanesh |
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