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Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2008-08-23 03:11 AM



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bitter scent of fall


sharp serrated air
breathes under cloudless blue sky
decomposition
of leaves and ripe cranberries
creates an acrid perfume

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Alison

© Copyright 2008 Alison - All Rights Reserved
nourzihane
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1 posted 2008-08-23 05:51 AM


Dear Alison


Thank you for your nice words


God bless you

have a nice day


nourzihane

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2 posted 2008-08-23 06:21 AM


ms ali-san..I know a lady that wears that perfume..acrid...so I always smoke a cigar when I see her crossing over into my side of the ghetto..enjoyed your pen here babe
Margherita
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3 posted 2008-08-23 11:21 AM


You caught this slice of fall beautifully in picture and words, dear Alison!

A vivid display of colors and scents.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

OwlSA
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4 posted 2008-08-23 01:47 PM


Oh, I breathed in the chill in the air and the acrid perfume of the rotting fruit and I saw that clean, clean sky, and for a moment I was in Alaska.  Beautiful photo too!  Thanks for the trip, Alison.  I got back safely!

- Owl

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5 posted 2008-08-23 06:54 PM


Wonderful write and picture!
secondhanddreampoet
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6 posted 2008-08-23 07:24 PM


grand-fine imagery (both poetic and photographic)!

serious applause for this 'penning'!

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Gaia
7 posted 2008-08-23 07:29 PM


I remember that acrid scent well!
Great photo, Ali.

LindsayP
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8 posted 2008-08-25 12:52 PM



Great picture, great verse

Dear Alison, Take a bow for this one.

Love  Lindsay

Alison
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9 posted 2008-08-25 02:24 AM


nourzihane

Thank you so much for reading and enjoying.  That makes the poem special to me.

Alison

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D

You made me laugh Pepsi through my nose when I read this.  Damn, I am not going to smell fall here in quite the same way.

A

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Margherita,

Thank you so much for reading and replying - and, above all, thank you for enjoying it.

Love,
Alison

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-Owl,

Welcome home and I am glad that you are safely home.  Inhale the cool air and think of me.

xoxoxo
Alison

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Marti,

Thank you so much.

xoxoxo
Alison

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Bruce,

You always make me smile.  Thank you for that.

Hugs,
Alison

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Kacy,

I was thinking of you when I wrote this poem.  I knew that you would remember the smell and know just what I write of.

Alison

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Lindsay,

I just want to give you a big hug.  Thank you.

Alison

Marchmadness
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10 posted 2008-08-27 05:04 PM


Beautiful observation, Alison. I'll take an ounce of that scent.
                              Ida

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11 posted 2008-08-28 12:31 PM


I love that scent. Cant wait to smell it again!
MsMelissaMae
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12 posted 2008-08-28 02:18 AM


Ah this poems just makes me crave the wonders of fall...I cant believe its almost here! I love the picture and the emotion I felt after reading this brilliant poem.
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