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I Love Your Girl
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I Love Your Girl |
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Rocky Junior Member
since 2008-06-12
Posts 25 |
I love your girlfriend with all of my heart. her not being mine is just tearing me apart. your girlfriend mean's everything to me. I need her as my girlfriend don't you see. I love her more than you'll ever know. I cannot make it on my own. I love her don't you see. I truly do. I wish she was with me instead of with you. o how I yearn to hold her in my arms and caress her for without her I am nothing but a breathing lie. I love her and will love her forever. please let me love her too. please don't let my heart die. I love your girlfriend with all of my heart. I love her and always have from the start. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is very well written, dear Rocky, but to love someone else's girl is a risky business I fear! But of course it happens often just like that. To love means to wish the beloved's happiness. And who knows she might discover you and fall for you ... Love, Margherita |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rocky~ Poetic venting is good for us~ Obviously 'she' wants to be with him, or she would be with you ... I think addressing your plea to him is kind of an empty issue, at least to me~ You 'might' wish to re-work this with a plea to the girl that you feel you can't live without ? I'd have to admit that I wasn't overly fond of the menacing title~ Sounds a bit threatening to me~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
I feel for you Rocky because I was young once and know the feeling, but believe me with time you will meet someone else and your star will shine again. good luck my friend. Lindsay |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Rocky, I think this is a great way to work through your feelings. I also like the poem - you made me remember how it feels. Alison |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rocky~ I am glad to see that you changed the title~ Much different for a lead in~  Knowing that you are open to gentle suggestions is a good thing to know~ Now it reads more as a compliment to him for his choice in having her~ Those reading this are offering you some good advice~ If this should happen to be a real life situation ... (and poetic thoughts sometimes are not), then I am sure you, or anyone else in this situation, would know that it would be fruitless to plead to the other guy to let you take his girl ... should she want you, she'll gladly leave him ... but, the choice is hers, for she is not his chattel and is free to make her own choices~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Rocky Junior Member
since 2008-06-12
Posts 25 |
If you want something than what you must do is work for it, even if it's not yours. If it belongs to somebody else than barter for it { in this case try and get him to lust after another girl, trust me that's one thing that most of the time gets a girl to leave her boyfriend is desire to adalterate and I know two beautiful girls that would probably cause him to do that. |
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