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nourzihane
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0 posted 2008-08-17 06:32 AM



i have finally decided to withdraw. i have decided also to rise wite flags as well as go away from life..
there is no any possibility for leave taking.
i'm in a world and you are in an other
you want to travel and go away whereas i want to stay..
you like the day while i longe for the night.
you prefer the shape whereas i prefer the contant
you...you and me....me
each of us have discovered after crossing the road
that we have climbed the mistaken plane.
me and destiny are like the east and the ouest
me and destiny are like fire and water...
like raison and madness....the truth and lie.
they are deeply contrasted..
i have found my self drowned in the lac of tears
with blad's drops.these blad's drops are drown off from the exhausted heart.
a drop....a drop
i have dicovred that i have not anderstood
i have discovered also that my hart have not well caught.
the vibration of emotions.
i have not haerd..i have not seen
each mistak is a lie and an illusion at the same time.
finally the most difecult moment have come
to confess that you have mistaken.

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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2008-08-17 07:14 AM


Dear friend nourzihane, this is a strong outcry of your bleeding heart. Even though your knowledge of English needs improvement, your message comes across powerfully.

Allow me to quote you while correcting some typos:
quote:

I have finally decided to withdraw. I have decided also to rise white flags as well as to move away from life's challenges ...
there is no possibility to take some time to reflect.
I'm in a world and you are in an other,
you want to travel and go away whereas I want to stay ...
you like the day while I long for the night.
You prefer the shape/form whereas I prefer the content
you...you and me....me
we both have discovered, after crossing the road,
that we had boarded the wrong plane.
Me and destiny are like the east and the west
me and destiny are like fire and water...
like reason and madness....the truth and the lie.
They are in deep contrast ...
I have found my self drowned in the lake of tears
with blood's drops. These drops of blood fall off from the exhausted heart.
A drop....a drop ...
I have dicovered that I did not understand.
I have discovered also that my heart had not well caught the vibration of emotions.
I have not heard... I have not seen.
Every mistake is a lie and an illusion at the same time.
Finally the most difficult moment has come
to confess that you were mistaken.


May you decide for your highest good, my sweet and sad friend. Know that you are deeply loved and cherished by the Creator of all life and that He wants you to be happy, after the shedding of so many tears. And you are invited to co-create your life.
We learn while living. So may you just love yourself and forgive what you think needs to be forgiven and move on ... towards a brighter future.

Walk in peace and continue to share your profound reflections on life and love and you will see you will love the day too and sunshine!

Thank you for sharing.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

nourzihane
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since 2008-07-10
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2 posted 2008-08-17 08:57 AM


dear margherita

I am glad that you're the first person who replys to my topic
thank you for your correction and sorry for the distrub and this pushes me forward to better learn the english language
Fortunately that i found the person who helps me to achieve all this
thank you  again

nourzihane

Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2008-08-17 09:36 AM


You do not disturb, ever!!
I loved your poem and I loved to give it the deserved attention.

You and your destiny are friends not enemies, I know that you are wise, my friend.

You will improve your English. I need also to improve, we can never learn enough!

Bisous
Margherita  

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2008-08-17 02:54 PM


I enjoyed your poem, Nourzihane but the red print is very hard on the eyes.
                                  Ida

nourzihane
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since 2008-07-10
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5 posted 2008-08-18 09:53 AM


dear margherita


All my appreciation. love and respect for your presence, which i derive from it the movement  and the activity.

There remains a dark corner doesn't shine(ignite) it candles
untill you come with this wonderful sparkling

thank you

Bisou

nourzihane
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since 2008-07-10
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6 posted 2008-08-18 09:55 AM


....sir....

thank you for your wonderful pass

nourzihane

martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
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Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic
7 posted 2008-09-02 07:17 AM


Yes margherita put a lovely spin on this poem. It read well, but the essence was stil there.
your first line was scarily dark.
you may have waved the white flag at life
but you live
Vive la Nourzihane!

nourzihane
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since 2008-07-10
Posts 254
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8 posted 2008-09-03 06:18 AM


Dear martiniat8

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