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Danny Cobb Member
since 2008-07-09
Posts 74
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forgive me for my momentary lapse of good judgment and my selfish persual of my own agenda that serves only me and ignors any good to accomplish. I am not always such a selfish twit I too have feelings and a sense of compassion for those who have it so much harder than me but then I get blinded in my minds own eye. I sicerely hope that all it is, is a momentary lapse and nothing more sinster and serious which would grow into a total self absorption obscuring what positive good I do possess and creating a totally obnoxious personage that no one could possible stand or want to tolerate as a social outcast and enigma of a personal calamity, may it just be a temporary phase I am going through a learning curve, a growing spurt that will fade with time like the abandoned cocoon, once the more glorious butterfly has emerged to new heights of existance a former totally hollow and shallowness that is only fit to be cast aside to be able to allow a thing of beauty to exist where once an ugly and fruitless self-isolation dwelt. [This message has been edited by Danny Cobb (08-11-2008 07:25 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, that was really good  |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
very good, i especially like the learning curve you made with the words. just a question, is it spelled cacoon or cocoon? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Danny~ I'm enjoying reading your poetic thoughts~ **Check your email, okay?** *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Danny Cobb, This is difficult to read. try it in Navy Blue font. Always capitalize you first person singular pronoun "I". Bobby |
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Danny Cobb Member
since 2008-07-09
Posts 74 |
Thanks everyone for your kind & constructive comments on my poem. Bobby, I changed the lower case "i" to "I" as you suggested, but was unable to change the font color. Thanks for the advice! danny cobb |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Hi Danny, this is wonderful write; I got to learn so many new words from your poem and the meaning of your write is very good. Prasad |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Enjoyed this wise and sensitive write, Danny. Ida |
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