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Denouement

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 08-08-2008 09:29 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

I can't stay the hand of this:
the truth of my indifference.
I can't fake an interest
nor risk the burden of more sin.

It's not a grudge. It's not a beast
of hatred that gnaws hungrily.
I simply cannot pay the cost
of a party for long lost

dreams denied in finality.
I should send a funeral wreath.
"In abstentia" regrets?

A fragment stamped as sentence is
still a fragment, if it is
the truth of our selves incomplete
lacking punctuated dots
a third of an ellipsis, caught
as if I'd died expressing it

unaware that I was "done"
I meant to write two endings---one
denouement with a few options --

easier to sell a thought
inherent possibility
than dreams denied: finality..

Hands dirtied by the toss of earth
upon the coffin's buried worth
surrounded by the astroturf

with chairs aligned for the bereaved

shaded from the sun or rain,
as we take care to walk the walk
unable to avoid the graves
of all the others we have laid

to rest with so much care

because

our future lies beneath our feet.

Then we go to wandering
amongst the stones
(the last ones thrown)

"I think he's somewhere over there..."

(He was hard to find, alive.)

He'd hate this ritual, I know.
I found him and I placed a stone
just in case he wasn't "home".

A calling card from me, atones
all the times that I did not.
Something solid comforts me
before I board the limousine,

a gray one, for the family

a color chosen thoughtfully
as if discretion's
retrospect
might impact directionals

of where forever dwells.
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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 08-09-2008 12:24 AM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

Powerful paint!
I heard taps play...that was the humor of me... yet, my heart trembled with the tenderness in which you placed the rose.
Hugs
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2 posted 08-09-2008 12:57 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I can only hope someone will say that I was hard to find too when I was alive Nicely done K, and a very vivid calling card was left this day by you.
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3 posted 08-09-2008 08:52 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

k~

The tender poignancy of this darts behind my eyes, waiting for a place to exit~

'A calling card from me, atones
all the times that I did not.'


Gentle *Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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4 posted 08-09-2008 11:18 AM       View Profile for OwlSA   Email OwlSA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OwlSA

I walked every step and thought-moment of this with you, though it is an oldie as you said.  I felt a thousand emotions and non-emotions crashing against each other, all echoed in my own life, and so I believe I understand, even if I am wrong.

Hugs, Karen

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5 posted 08-09-2008 03:24 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Dear Karen, I am impressed by the thoughts you express here on this melancholic occasion.

Strange how cemeteries can grow and expand almost like second towns and how so often we wander and search for someone unsure if we will ever locate them. I have experienced this just a few days ago when - after years - I accompanied my husband to find his father's grave in his hometown, I feared we would get lost and never find the way out again ... and it was so extremely hot I thought we could just drop dead there and then ...! But he found him, maybe he guided him from Above?!

Shuddering slightly ...

You are incredibly good!

Love,
Margherita
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6 posted 08-10-2008 04:30 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

oh m'lovely ladies...

This one is new (I think) but I've worked the death theme to death, so it probably feels as old as I do today.

Thank you all for reading this, even though I confess I didn't put a whole lot of work into it (meaning I didn't try for a "style" or re-arrange it a bunch)

it just sorta fell outta the ceiling, and into my head and passed through my fingertips to...here.

I appreciate your comments and time, very much. If I were a better poet, I could express how much I love you all. I just don't think it can be done.
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7 posted 08-11-2008 08:55 AM       View Profile for icebox   Email icebox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for icebox

It is a good poem Kid, wrenching.  Maybe like Townes Van Zandt said, you were just sitting in the right place when it was passing through.

Don't worry about forever, It dwells in all of us.

s'Lainte!
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8 posted 08-11-2008 09:01 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

this touches...for many reasons.
Mark Bohannan
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The eternity of forever dwells within a capsule of time that none of us own except in our memories.  It is our choice if we drift in it or swim in it.  It is always a pleasure to read one of your works.  Big hugs.
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10 posted 08-12-2008 12:30 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes

"A calling card from me, atones
all the times that I did not."


This touches deeply, Karen...

Love ya lots, my sis...



"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix
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11 posted 08-12-2008 08:16 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

You always blow me away to somewhere, Ser....

enjoyed

"...buried way beneath the sheets
I think she's having a meltdown..."
"Buckcherry"

Artic Wind
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Serenity! you do got that 'way with words' down for ya..
(Explaing what I ment)-> You got a way with words Karen lol

Excellent Write!


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13 posted 08-12-2008 12:46 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

good read
lucky
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14 posted 08-25-2008 07:52 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Hi Karen,
glad I stopped in long enough to take in some
of your resent work. I thought the opening
could of used a little more of that..? Hmmmm.,
Karen detail storytellin stuff you do.

best friends best finds
dale
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15 posted 08-26-2008 12:50 PM       View Profile for Marchmadness   Email Marchmadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marchmadness

Those poems that just "fall on our head" seem to come from a special place and therefore
touch the heart and mind in ways that often surprise us. This seems to be that kind of poem, Karen.
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Hey sweetie...

I know awesome is an overused word, but I'm slightly overused, myself.



Incredible sounds in this one.



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nice thoughts

serenity blaze
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18 posted 08-26-2008 10:11 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thanks again, everyone!
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Karen...So glad too see you are doing better and able to write.

And who shall be the last
to walk the walk
when you are the last
one to go.
Who will cast the final stone
shovel the last
bit of dirt
onto your final resting place

Will those yet to come
read your tombstone
will they bring flowers to mark the
place you now call
home

another ending
in abstentia
I pray i'm
not the last
cause then the birds
will pick my bones

Just some thoughts that came to me from your magical words...Paul

[This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (08-28-2008 11:06 AM).]

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20 posted 08-28-2008 12:24 AM       View Profile for scorpio eyes shut   Email scorpio eyes shut   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for scorpio eyes shut

"A calling card from me, atones
all the times that I did not."

we are all fated to live with our little guilts...you have put it in a very lucid perspective. thank you.
Susan Caldwell
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21 posted 08-29-2008 01:17 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

"our future lies beneath our feet"

That statement and it's truth shut me down for a few minutes.

Outstanding as usual.

  I love you madly.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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22 posted 04-24-2010 03:20 PM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

He'd hate this ritual, I know.
I found him and I placed a stone
just in case he wasn't "home".


You are so very gifted my friend. Hoping some one places a stone upon my grave of ashes.
jo

 
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