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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2008-08-06 07:20 PM


My thoughts meander back to Spring.
Warmth, sunshine, and birds in sing...
Inspiration from sweet song,
I smile and turn my pc on.

"I must record these thoughts of glory--
the wonderment of Nature's story!"
Clicking keys in rhythmic trust-
my words unfurling Springtime's lust.

Suddenly, without a clue,
my screen became deep shade of blue.
"Egads! and Drat! Oh no!" I cry.
For on my screen was one word: "sigh."

A sigh? Methinks it can't be true!
Then three more words: "I love you."
Surely this must be a joke!
Then I jumped back--my pc spoke!

"Of course I love you," said pc.
"I wish you'd write a poem for ME.
We've been together many years.
I've wept with you each single tear.

Yet every word, you write for him.
You think that crash was just my whim?
I have a heart like all good folk!
The night I crashed? My heart...just...broke."

"But," I typed, "this just can't be.
You have no heart. You're a machine!"

"I can't believe you'd be so cold,"
cried pc, "you have no soul!"

The screen was fading--fading fast.
"Please don't go," I typed, "come back!"
"Apologize." The screen went black.
"I'm sorry! It is me that lacks!"

All my words I then recanted.
"I'm sorry I took you for granted."
"Say you love me..." warned pc.
"Then write a poem just for me!"

"I love you! And? I will be true!"
PC? This poem's just for YOU.

I should have seen it all along.
Somehow? I turned my pc ON!!!!




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Artic Wind
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1 posted 2008-08-06 07:31 PM



"Of course I love you," said pc.
"I wish you'd write a poem for ME.
We've been together many years.
I've wept with you each single tear....."

This is my favorite!



Now this is funny!-- You're love between you and your computer lol

I am sure he would love this poem deeply you wrote for Mr.PC
*smiling*  

ARCTIC WIND                      


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2 posted 2008-08-06 08:47 PM


Your PC has GOT to be a MAC!!!
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3 posted 2008-08-07 11:59 AM




Can't let this one drop yet!

:
ARCTIC WIND

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4 posted 2008-08-07 12:13 PM


Karen, I absolutely love it - and so does Lilian, my laptop!

- Owl

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5 posted 2008-08-07 12:22 PM


Turning on seems to be your thing
In winter, summer, fall, or spring.
The words you say to your pc
Transmit to everyone, even me!

You write your heart, and soul from home
I feel yours words in every poem.

A sample of that here today,
I leave for you while on my way ..........

quote:

Yet every word, you write for him.
You think that crash was just my whim?
I have a heart like all good folk!
The night I crashed? My heart...just...broke."
  




        

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6 posted 2008-08-07 05:01 PM


I remember this...and I smiled
just as large as I did the first
time I read this gem!




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7 posted 2008-08-07 11:23 PM


k~
I had not read this gem before
now I find that I simply adore
the all of it ... every word
a PC with a ...
not at all absurd~

I JUST LOVE IT !!
And you~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Veni Mortem
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8 posted 2008-08-08 11:57 AM


Lol! ^_^ I loved it!
And I must say, I think my computer needs a poem, too...
If every time it crashes it's heart is broken... Then I have a VERY sad computer. O_O;

Artic Wind
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9 posted 2008-08-08 12:07 PM


I am actually going to save this one serenity! it's a true funny Gem!

  
      

ARCTIC WIND

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10 posted 2008-08-08 12:57 PM


I'm no poetic critic, but thats fantastic, very very talented.
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11 posted 2008-08-08 06:35 PM


I've been digging the archives too, A.W.--picking and choosing what I want to keep, re-working some of the more awkward posts.

Marge? If I made you smile, then I'm happy that I reposted this one. (I'd hesitated because I'd reposted it a few times.)

But I thank you all, as this one amused me too as it was inspired by my seemingly symbiotic relationship that developed with my computer upon my discovery of this place!

Love to all!

vlraynes
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12 posted 2008-08-12 12:40 PM


*smiling at this one*

Love this, Karen...
and love YOU...

thanks for the smile...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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