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Spuddette
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England

0 posted 2008-08-04 01:10 PM



My big beautiful lump on the line of the sky
Like a flea on a beast I crawled all over you.
A tickle on your torso.
My knackered old monster you were dead asleep
dreaming those days spent working your land
(so I climbed on your belly and ran up and down).
Herds of woolly sheep couldn't wake my heap
He shall not shove.
I stretched myself out in your navel
to share your view of the passing clouds.
Vaporous mounds reflect you from above
and trace the outline of me on your peak.
Now I gaze at you from my window and speak
-like a girl in love.


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2008-08-04 01:12 PM


Totally charming.
Marchmadness
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2 posted 2008-08-04 01:16 PM


Love this,  I wrote one myself about the hill my brothers and I played on as children.
                                 Ida

HopeS
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3 posted 2008-08-04 02:19 PM


Geeez , this brought back memories , I did venture up Pendle hill many , many years ago


Hope

Spuddette
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4 posted 2008-08-04 02:55 PM


Thankyou all for commenting.
Hope - you were a long way from home! This is my favourite walk, from the "nick" at Sabden right across to the other side and down the ascent and over to Downham (where they filmed Whistle down the wind -with Hayley Mills!). Its one of the most peaceful places, aside from all the fellrunners lol.

OwlSA
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5 posted 2008-08-06 05:12 PM


Janet, I loved this too and the delightful humour in it.  You certainly have a perfect brush to paint the country side with.  Again, my favourite line was the (woolly) sheep line, and not just because sheep are animals.  They just seemed so perfect there.

- Owl

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2008-08-08 11:40 AM


So now how will you top this?
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
7 posted 2008-08-09 11:22 AM


Enjoyed!


ARCTIC WIND

Margherita
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Eternity
8 posted 2008-08-09 12:21 PM


quote:
I stretched myself out in your navel
to share your view of the passing clouds.



What a great, fascinating way to declare your love to this special place.

Love,
Margherita

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