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Veni Mortem
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0 posted 2008-08-03 05:20 PM


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Something seems it’s in rotation
Yet I find myself alone,
Standing still

Omnipresent visitation
Cursing graveside limitation
Still, I find myself alone,
Standing still

Constant friction, time is ticking
Feels as if the world’s exploded
Flowing motion, now it’s tricking
All my thoughts, my mind’s eroded

Fields of sin and shattered skin
Wounds have opened up again
Let me fall into the constant stream of blood

All I’ve lost and all I’ve reached
All I’ve healed and all I’ve breached
Now I see that withdrawal will do no good

I think there’s something there
I can smell it in the air
But I find myself alone,
Standing still

Though my sky is radiant
All my thoughts are gradient
I can’t help but feel alone,
Standing still

While you’re striving for redemption
Heart and mind are in decay
And you’re blinded by your emption
Of another fee to pay

And I see that these distractions
Only patch my soul by fractions
All I feel is that I want to crawl away

Confidence is but a dream world
To a hopeless little shell hurled
Now into a world of crustacea deities

In decay, shun indication
Free gyration levitation
Evacuate my confrontation
Try to hide my situation
Should I die now, should I die?
Should I die now, should I die?

How can I survive
In a behemoth’s world
While I’m in this homuncular form?

And I know there’s something there
I can feel it all around me
But I find myself alone,
Standing still

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2008-08-03 05:58 PM


I am startled again by yet another line of yours today:

"Fields of sin and shattered skin
Wounds have opened up again
Let me fall into the constant stream of blood"

(I share spare the indelicate details)



*shaking my head*

I've been missing out, apparently.

You do go deep...my my. (and I'm resisting the urge for yet another bad joke of mine)

My bad jokes are a very bad habit.

Enjoyed.

Veni Mortem
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2 posted 2008-08-04 10:13 AM


serenity- Thank you, thank you. ^_^ I'm glad it was enjoyed.
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3 posted 2008-08-04 01:15 PM


I peeked at your deviantart stuff too.



Much enjoyed that as well, and I've been giving that stuff a try m'self. And lawsy, you could be kin...

I have a story somewhere about an anime' convention I attended with my kids--"Mom" nearly got arrested!

*shaking my head*

Watch it--I collect young'ns. *chuckle*

Veni Mortem
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4 posted 2008-08-04 02:10 PM


Oh, thank you for visiting! ^^
Lol, I'll have to hear that story sometime. ^_^

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5 posted 2008-08-04 02:33 PM


Here ya go!
/pip/Forum29/HTML/001822.html

And I wince at the generalizations of the teens...forgive me for that, I was new to the realm of raising teens, m'self.

I love my kids (now 17 & 18) and your artwork reminds me very much of my daughter's as well. But just as you stated on your own deviantart site, she also finds that classic anime' characters has limited her audience a bit, so she's expanded (I think). I only see the occasional acerbic lampoons--dead-on-balls accurate--sometimes at my expense to my dismay.

(and btw, yes, yer Dad pointed you out to me, but if I wasn't genuinely intrigued--you'd know.)

I appreciate your humor, talent and insight very much, and Your Clocktower is driving me slightly batty--as it brought up memories of an old story I loved--the title of which is just on the tip of my tongue...

You've got some very thoughtful insights going on, and allusions to so many classics it makes my head light up like a pinball machine.

So read the story, but forgive my ancient point of view, k? But I really did have a blast at that show!

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6 posted 2008-08-04 02:40 PM


Uh... wow.

I haven't read any of your writing before this, and now I see I have sorely missed out.
Back I go to correct the error of my ways.

What would you attempt to do...if you knew you could not fail?.
www.myspace.com/mindlesspoet

Veni Mortem
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7 posted 2008-08-05 10:02 AM


serenity- Lol, quite a story you have there! ^_^ Sounds like it was fun. I've never heard of the band "Casimo" though; I'm ashamed of myself. >.<
*nods* I'm exploring other styles, but anime will always have a place in my heart!


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