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WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

0 posted 2008-10-04 12:24 PM

Elysian Fields

Yesterday
I saw her dance with abandon
among dappled foliage,
spreading a mystical love,
the fragrance of spring
to a quiet, lonely place.

She entered my beingness,
touched me with tenderness,
filled me with happiness,
sated my hunger for love.

Those became the times
we discovered crazy love:
In our Elysian Fields,
safely hidden
from a world of prying eyes
we hid and we played;
we laughed... and we slept...

Relentlessly came the changes;
I woke up cold one morning,
felt the lonely winds of autumn.
Now winter winds moan
as I sit to ponder beside crackling embers
while leaves and frozen snow
drift upon their wintry grave.

Will I join them, or remain;
find the courage to rekindle,
to re-discover,
those Elysian Fields
with their limited joy,
couched in so much sorrow?
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               "I once knew a place of solitude
              where birds sang to the rising sun
              and the world turned serenely."

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-10-04 02:55 PM

nice write...loved the following:

"She entered my beingness,
touched me with tenderness,
filled me with happiness,
sated my hunger for love."

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

2 posted 2008-10-04 03:19 PM

WindWalker,

Excellent write of romance, but I feel some sorrow. I liked this a lot, look forward to reading more of your writings...

BC

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

3 posted 2008-10-04 07:04 PM

I am especially fond of the beginning of this "penning":

“Yesterday
I saw her dance with abandon
among dappled foliage,
spreading a mystical love,
the fragrance of spring
to a quiet, lonely place.”

AND, the grand-fine imagery in:

“Relentlessly came the changes;
I woke up cold one morning,
felt the lonely winds of autumn.
Now winter winds moan
as I sit to ponder beside crackling embers
while leaves and frozen snow
drift upon their wintry grave.”

Effective ending and added quote as well!

SIGNIFICANT, sustained applause!!

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

4 posted 2008-10-04 09:39 PM

Yes much enjoyed WindWalker, you wrote it well.

Lindsay

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2008-10-05 01:37 PM

Saved faster than I can say "Elysian Fields"!!!

I do so enjoy your poetry, dear WW!!! I take away something special from every poem of yours that I read!!!

Sending a kindred spirit hug of love,
EA

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

6 posted 2008-10-05 03:31 PM

Yo WindWalker,

This is very nice work. It's good to see your stuff again.

Bobby

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2008-10-05 09:00 PM

"Now winter winds moan
as I sit to ponder beside crackling embers"

Late at night, above the silent snowfall, perhaps you hear her gentle song over those crackling embers.
A poignant, tender love song, WW.

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