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mystic forests |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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Mystic forest _ 2 (color is rust) =================================== A forsaken farm cart, rust red is on an ancient plough, hum of green desert is engulfing the scenario. Ripples on the river have a slow drone. You can not break it just throwing few stones. Past civilizations have been absorbed by this forest. A forest of no reservation. “Quite un-reserved in case you find an animal and a gun.” Your friend sometimes jokes and his jokes are quite rude and raw. Of course he never knows the type of prey you may choose. You smile at the reminiscence as her body drifts through silent water. It has learned to keep its secrets in an un-reserved forest. Mystic Forest _1 =========================================== A smell that we cannot sense in our city orb creeps in, green flag of it flies, wins over our heart. “what will be available for dinner this night?” “Wild chickens if you wish.” Smiles through his busted dentures, the old caretaker of the forest lodge. “What? Tiger? Nothing that fierce.” Of course we forget The most fierce of all, us. clever talks delay friendship! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You have a gentle but straightforward way of revealing our human weaknesses, without 'beating' us down. Good to read your insights again, poet. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Poddar, that was a superb write! Vividly descriptive and engaging! "Of course we forget The most fierce of all, us." ~ Alas, 'tis true!  Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I am amazed at how you create such vivid scenarios and emotions, it's like being there witnessing through your powerful words, dear Ku! I have missed you and your excellent poems!! Love, Margherita |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I agree with all these assessments and loved this opening for it's complimenting yet semi-contradiction of the use of "desert"--- quote: ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Mystical Writes LOL  ARCTIC WIND |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...Jmaes |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Poddarku, Rather than a prose response, I found that your poem seemed to want a poem in response. This isn't very finished, I'm afraid, more like a first draft, but here it is. If you'd like to respond with a poem to this one, I'd love to see it. If you look closely, you'll see that it's a pretty direct response. "Vertical Integration Reaches The City" Surely future gang fights will not Find acceptance on such well behaved streets, Boulevards of fashionable table manners Incapable of coping with layers Of manners more exquisite still Find themselves littered with accidents. Nobody can explain it. The entire City rusts solid when unnamed Economists working at the University First mention vertical integration. This must be a foul idea, somebody's Poor notion of a joke!, of some Horrible unbalanced social movement. We must locate this person, Find the place where his shoes are Defiling our proud sidewalks And kill him. Somebody with nothing Better to do will be by later With an abandoned Chinese farm cart And slip that body with its Offensive ideas into the river. By then at least it will have Learned the meaning of discretion. Do not even imagine his body As it floats face down in the river Will burst into flame like sodium. —Bob Kaven |
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MOCindy Member
since 2008-07-30
Posts 73 |
My dear friend Ku, beautiful poem as always. (your soft words is like a shining knife to open human soul!!) Bob K's poem is wonderful too. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Poddarku, This is good work. I can't imagine eating a Tiger, However, I'd like to know, are they tasty, and are they eaten? Bobby |
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Lady Ayla Member
since 2008-07-19
Posts 84WV, United States |
That was the perfect line to end it. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Of course we forget The most fierce of all, us." extremely beautiful powerful |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I have to rush to work, and will come back to this. Just couldn't resist opening it when I saw your name and the title. I remember the first Mystic Forest very well. Words dance at your bidding, as always. - Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I'm back, and made time to enjoy both slowly, but especially the new one. Those first few lines were very reminiscent of the use of colour in Red Wheelbarrow of William Carlos Williams. Kushal, one of the many reasons why I enjoy your poetry so much is that you are so in tune with the Universe. - Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Most interesting write, Ku. Love the title. Ida |
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