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gdcod2player
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since 2008-07-26
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0 posted 2008-07-27 04:20 AM



I’d like to tell you my name
But I’d never bring my self to it
Yesterday I wanted to call your name
But I never got to it
Your pretty eyes
Made me a fool for you
Everything I do seems to make you turn away
Maybe it’s not the person you see
I don’t smoke or drink
So I don’t know how you don’t see me
I guess I never thought of the person I am
Am I mean?
Or is it just I’m the boring one of us all?
You make me wake before dawn
So I can get ready to go
To the work place to see your beautiful heart
Don’t worry I won’t hurt it
I know it’s unique
And hard to repair
There’s nothing like it in the world
But maybe you want to make sure
And keep it with you safe from the cold
You see everyday

I saw you look at me
I thought I should keep my eyes from closing
Before you looked the other way
Now I’ve been waiting for some time
To ask you for your name
I finally gave up waiting
So I asked you right away
You said
“Who are you, why do you ask me”
I didn’t think of anything to say
So I wrote you something
I hope you think its worth your time to read
I hope you learn that I live life in shame


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-07-27 08:27 AM


We are behaving strangely when we are in love no doubt!
Your last sentence leaves me in perplexity ... what makes you think it would please her to learn that you "live your life in shame?"
"who are you, why do you ask me?" doesn't exactly show a good-hearted nature, but maybe your note will soften her?

Lovely outpour of your heart.

Love,
Margherita

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
2 posted 2008-07-27 11:16 AM


This is a sensitive and stirring write.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

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