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apes531
Junior Member
since 2008-07-23
Posts 35


0 posted 2008-07-27 01:48 AM


How am I feeling today you ask..
Well trying to explain is such a hard task.
It’s been 2 weeks, and still no letter,
How come..? This choice cant get any better.

I’m starting not to care,
I’ve realized lifes not fair.
The past few days,
Are such a haze.

Take a look at me, whats inside?
Everything I’ve every tried to hide.
I wear this fake ass smile,
Cuz I’m leaving in denial.

You say everythings gonna be alright,
But theres no light in sight.
To take a lifes that’s just not me,
Damn I wish you were here to see.

I can’t do this on my own
I need your answer, either by letter of phone.
When this poem started I wanted to keep it..
But now my minds changed s**t..



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XGarapanX
Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
1 posted 2008-07-27 11:26 AM


Another segment of this traumatic story. Terribly intelligent writing. You hit the highlights spot on with every stanza and it makes the reader feel this.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

gdcod2player
Member
since 2008-07-26
Posts 117

2 posted 2008-07-27 04:47 PM


Amazing
i want to write decent is why i joined
reading yours hopefully will help me
but that is amazing

Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
3 posted 2008-08-12 08:04 PM


powerful write!! i really like
flow you got going here...you can
feel the emotion coming right off
the page...not an easy task. i look
forward to reading more of your work!

take care,

aims

The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return.
Eden Ahbez

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2008-08-12 09:52 PM


Very Powerful write indeed!

    
ARCTIC WIND

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