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The Black Waltz
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The Black Waltz |
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Gaelynsgirl Member
since 2008-07-18
Posts 175Ont. Canada 
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The Black Waltz I would you were a raven That you might fly Upon the wind Within my soul The sound of air To echo in my heart To wit, to feed, and scrounge A life, a day To tumble through the grey To sun upon my back and roost Within the knowledge of peers And feeding upon this ken And then to follow on the path Of shared existence. In vagrant company we overwhelm the strength Of the willful few. Upon the road A gift of momentary consequence To thrive in death, This posture flagrant pose. We spring upon a chance To court and dance The black waltz. So how is it you flee When we were meant to be For life, this mated pair. The raven knows The steps even though He cannot hear the music. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"So how is it you flee When we were meant to be For life, this mated pair. The raven knows The steps even though He cannot hear the music." Yeah, it's really not too much to ask for an explanation, is it? |
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Gaelynsgirl Member
since 2008-07-18
Posts 175Ont. Canada |
You would have to know that ravens mate for life. The caprice of some humanity renders honouring committment impossible. This is not so in ravens. They do not hear the waltz of our reasons, but they know the depth and meaning of the word. Lynda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love the comparison. This is a very beautiful and insightful write. In observing the animal reign, we could learn quite a few lessons no doubt. Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I loved this, kin - its pathos, its passion, its beauty, the power and goodness of nature, the images, the metaphors, its balm for human pain, your interesting use of "sun" and your unusual and effective line break between "knows" and "The steps", to mention a few reasons. A poem I posted before you joined PIP and that is now in the last archive, follows: EVOLUTION 21 November 2006 My fervent prayer is that one day the human race will rise to the level of civilization of a troop of Vervet monkeys. - Owl |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms lynda. Enjoyed the poe poetic black skin shimmering of this romantica |
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Gaelynsgirl Member
since 2008-07-18
Posts 175Ont. Canada |
Thank you kin, Margherita, and DS. I appreciate the support immensely! What we can learn from animals certainly has taught me a thing or two. There's always room for growth. I'm playing with my grandson for a few days but I'll try and get on when he is absorbed by my other animals, the dogs*grin. with smiles... Lynda |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wonderful write! Eric |
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Gaelynsgirl Member
since 2008-07-18
Posts 175Ont. Canada |
Thank you Eric! I have been enjoying the ethereal quality of your work. |
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