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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2008-07-18 11:03 PM

I treasured every word
believed in your heart of gold.
You put wind in my sails
then brought me to still waters
to wallow in the ripple effect,
pondering my reflection in the moonlight.

Honest intentions are poor excuses
when used repeatedly.
Without a port of entry
there is no clear view in dreams
no light on shore that beams,
lost in our ways.

Like a picture postcard
from an island in paradise
a rendezvous in verse
watered down to tears
yours,  mine,  and hers
lit by stars in our eyes.

Oh desire is a steady heart beat
rafting gently down the stream,
and you were a glorious poem
before editing
the best part of me.

Needy is painful
like passing ships in the night
keeping company
on the stormy seas of life,
before the break of dawn
races against the wind.

You lost me
in those fleeting moments.
Like a fog settles in
weighing heavy
with each wave of good bye,
billows across a northern sky.

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (07-19-2008 01:33 AM).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2008-07-18 11:10 PM

dang bluesy...you are writing my life!

beautifully done!

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

2 posted 2008-07-19 12:14 PM

"Oh desire is a steady heart beat
rafting gently down the stream
and you were a glorious poem
before editing
the best part of me."

Beautifully written work.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2008-07-19 12:29 PM

Thanks for reading ladies.
Least I'm not the only one sitting home on a Friday night.

I do have a life if I remember correctly.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2008-07-19 06:40 AM

ms bluezy...nice to see your moves ms

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2008-07-19 06:55 AM

quote:
You put wind in my sails
then brought me to still waters
to wallow in the ripple effect,
pondering my reflection in the moonlight.

Ahh, dear Lori, you have created a wondrous atmosphere and the poem lingers in its beauty and depth.

Love,
Margherita

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2008-07-19 10:48 AM

Thanks Meester.  Got coffee?

Margherita~  I just think that we are easily seduced
by the written word, and made worse when there's a pattern.
Suffice to say, the world wide web is a mysterious place to be.
I appreicate you, Margherita.  Thank you.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2008-07-19 02:55 PM

Lori, I found myself sadly nodding my head with understanding and compassion as I read your soulful stream of words.

Your pen spills an eloquent brand of ink.

Love to you, Lovely Lori!
Linda xo

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

8 posted 2008-07-19 09:11 PM

I was transported by your water-themed poem, Ms Blues. We are all at times like ships in the night, eager to taste the salt on our bow and waiting for south easterly winds to fill our sails so that we may travel to places unknown.

Indigo

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2008-07-20 03:28 AM

Lori, echoing the responses to your beautiful poem, including your own response.

Sadly hugging you and wishing you sunshine days, months and years

- Owl

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

10 posted 2008-07-20 04:09 AM

Ms Bluesy... if I may say, this was a wonderful gifting.. sad, reflective and very beautiful... thank you love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

11 posted 2008-07-20 09:33 AM

"I treasured every word
believed in your heart of gold.
You put wind in my sails
then brought me to still waters
to wallow in the ripple effect,
pondering my reflection in the moonlight."

Lor, a perfect verse~~
Missing you, if and when you want...an email is always welcome!

M

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

12 posted 2008-07-20 02:21 PM

Dear Bluesy, If you're asking for coffee then you've made it through! This poem reaches out and touches! People can do harsh and inconsiderate things but it only hurts if we let it but, of course, we hurt until we know to forget it. That can take a bit of time but eventually we ... ask for coffee!

Love
Helen

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2008-07-20 05:52 PM

Thanks to each of you for taking the time to read.
I never,  ever take for granted your support and ecouraging words.

It means a lot.
Hugs all around~

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