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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2008-07-17 12:28 PM



How gloriously
the future is unfolding
in golden hues of longing.
How gracefully
the wounds are healing
unravelling like solemn morning blooms,
dripping with psychic dew.
Hands are folding,
weaving like fire
a touch, an embrace,
a reality
untouched by humanity.
..And I must
tell you every little thing,
complicated by the smiles of the day,
oh, how touching,
your tears like mists around the mountains,
forming so tenderly in such a way,
that only water would envy
those instincts, those emotions
so ever-flowing in the scenery.

Forgiveness, the bruise of our time,
the stain on our sheets, where we sleep,
dreaming of our summer burden,
our gained years, our creases in the wind.
The scent of her perfume,
the pain of your inflictions,
so mesmorizing in my skin.
How whimsically
your touch of guilt envelopes me,
the time, the seclusion, the scar upon
your lonesome soul
will never disappear.

I will still be here.


© Copyright 2008 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2008-07-17 01:06 AM


You have been missed, sweet one.

I'll be here too, tomorrow. (I assume--grin?)

But this must be savored, and it's a yum-good note to tuck me into bed, too!




soul drifter
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2 posted 2008-07-17 01:40 AM


Tremendous! The ending is absolutely fantastic, the whole thing flowed and felt very beautiful.

Archivin'. This is my kind of stuff

"How do the angels get to sleep, when the devil leaves the porchlight on?" -- Tom Waits, 'Mr. Siegal'

Marchmadness
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3 posted 2008-07-17 02:54 AM


I don't think I have met you before, Kaoru
but you write lovely poetry.
                                    Ida

XGarapanX
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4 posted 2008-07-17 06:07 AM


How awesome is this piece? I like the way you write! Great poem, and I look forward to more of them.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2008-07-17 09:46 AM


Meghan, your words have been missed. Hoping  all is well in your life.


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Gaia
6 posted 2008-07-17 10:34 AM


"the wounds are healing
unraveling like solemn morning blooms,
dripping with psychic dew."

WOW! It is so great to read your creative imagery again, Meghan. Hope the little one is doing well, and you are enjoying all that life offers.

Musel
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7 posted 2008-07-17 11:19 AM


amazing poem,, by far the best i have read all day... it was inspiring to say the least.. I look forward to reading more...
Margherita
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8 posted 2008-07-17 11:28 AM


Powerful! Good to see you are back.

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
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9 posted 2008-07-17 02:53 PM


So lovely to see you and your exquisite poetry back again.

- Owl

passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2008-07-17 06:11 PM


Meghan when I saw your reply to my poem I nearly went to tears

I'm so glad you are back!


inkedgoddess
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11 posted 2008-07-17 10:15 PM


loved the psychic dew
and nothing typical about your expression
of this most passionate and angst filled
poem

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2008-07-17 10:19 PM


"the wounds are healing
unravelling like solemn morning blooms,"

Nod. Paint me green.

I want your eyes, to see things in such a beautifully positive way!



YOU...are lovely. But I'm willing to guess you've heard that before, huh?

Elfin Magick!

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
13 posted 2008-07-24 11:44 PM


Forgiveness, the bruise of our time,
the stain on our sheets, where we sleep,
dreaming of our summer burden,
our gained years, our creases in the wind.

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Gaaawd Kaoru, this is stunning, absolutely glorious poetry.
Yes, forgiveness is a powerful emotion and there's so much to be said
for the feeling,  the cause and effect,  and the scars that run deep.

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