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Angel4aKing
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0 posted 2008-07-14 11:20 PM


STEPPING STONES
OF SLIVERS
UNDER MY FEET
SWOLLEN NOW WITH
TINY BEADS
OF RAZOR SWEAT

CONFRONTING AN ENEMY
THAT HAS NO NAME
REMEMBERING THE ENDING
OF THIS SEEMINGLY ENDLESS GAME

THE LIGHT UNBLOCKED
THE STONES OVER TURNED
FINDNING OUT WE WEREN'T
THE ONLY ONES BURNED

PICKING UP THE TOSSED TOWEL
AND WIPING OFF THE SWEAT
HOPING THAT THIS IS A MOMENT
THAT WE WILL SOON FORGET

~~~kingsangel~~~

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XGarapanX
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1 posted 2008-07-14 11:24 PM


I like the write and the way it's presented but I am having trouble placing the subject/topic of the piece. Call me brainless, but could you elaborate? I'll come back to check for a reply.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

Angel4aKing
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2 posted 2008-07-15 12:01 PM


It's about the battles that we all fight and the painful paths that we take in order to survive and grow in life. The stepping stones made of slivers etc....enemies with no names...our selves being the our own worse enemies....picking up the tossed towel that presumably is left there after soemone else gave up....the will to succeed and win against all odds. Hope that's clear enough.........

~~~kingsangel~~~

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