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Martie
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0 posted 2008-07-14 08:07 PM



Cool lush moss shivers
stirring sunset into pond--
ripples on deer's face


© Copyright 2008 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-07-14 10:59 PM


It's hard to wrap my face around haiku's that aren't Japanesish because those are the kind I grew up reading, but this was very interesting and very good.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

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2 posted 2008-07-14 11:09 PM


Wonderfully concise, Martie!
Superb Haiku!
TB

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3 posted 2008-07-14 11:11 PM


This is so vivid, as if the camera is rolling!!

Nice to read you here, Martie~


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4 posted 2008-07-15 08:54 AM


Your words have a calming effect to them, Martie~~

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5 posted 2008-07-15 11:13 AM



One can feel the breeze, Sissie!


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6 posted 2008-07-15 11:39 AM


cool imagery and choice of words~shivers, stirring sunset
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7 posted 2008-07-15 03:45 PM


Wow...loved this!

Eric

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8 posted 2008-07-15 06:18 PM



MartieSis~

This Haiku ... so you~
Ripple of ink in pure think~
Greatest expression~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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9 posted 2008-07-15 06:41 PM


I have to confess, I'm not a fan of haiku, normally.

I can't write 'em, and wince, I don't generally like the majority of the attempts I read.

I think it's because I am actually a fan of the haiku to the extent that I hold it to a higher regard.

And this, lovely lady, is one of those that makes me smile, as you captured that nature essence that I feel qualifies the true haiku.

In other words? You hit a "homer"!

It's good to see you again too lovie.

Much enjoyed this--and I loved that it transcends the seasons--even though traditional haiku tends to depict such (arguably, no doubt) the fact that it is seasonless renders this timeless, and thus eternal.

And I just used a lot of words to applaud a few...but you get a big hug and a

"Brava!" from me!

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10 posted 2008-07-15 06:55 PM


The picture you paint, awakens my senses to the cool, as if I too was deer.
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11 posted 2008-07-16 04:53 PM


A wonderful haiku, I agree, dear Martie. So good to see you back!

Love,
Margherita

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12 posted 2008-07-17 06:17 PM


astounding!

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13 posted 2008-07-17 10:46 PM


I liked this also- because it is a picture with words.  Very nice.
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14 posted 2008-07-18 11:33 AM


Ahhh Nature!



ARCTIC WIND

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15 posted 2008-07-18 06:07 PM


Love haiku, Martie. I'm going to have to try one of those.
                               Ida

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16 posted 2008-07-18 08:31 PM


This is beautiful, Martie...

in just a few words,
you not only took me there
you made me 'feel' it

thank you...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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17 posted 2008-07-18 08:58 PM


Wonderful my friend...was there with the deer...j.

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