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Open Poetry #43

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rad802
Member

since 2008-04-19

Posts 279
KY U.S.A.

0 posted 2008-07-12 01:24 PM

I don't call out to the night. because it may be listening.
I don't hold on to dreams In case I'd choke them dead.
I don't wander in the wilderness. At least not lately.
I don't ever remember being more easily led.

God put the wind in your hair
and gave you that beautiful smile.
You dance with your arms in the air.
You can't help but showing off your lovely style.

The last thing my father said to me was just one word. "LOVE"
And I been searching ever since. I dont know what to do.
I couldn't be the man I hope to be in just one life.
I'd all but givin up and that's when I found you.

Rick Delmonico

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2008-07-12 03:41 PM

Your closing line was 'rad'!!! I bet you could even hear my sigh!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2008-07-20 01:12 AM

Oh, this is far too wonderful to be buried so soon. I like it lots.

Alison

Gaelynsgirl
Member

since 2008-07-18

Posts 175
Ont. Canada

3 posted 2008-07-20 10:43 AM

I hope you shared this with her!!! Oh to be loved like that!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-07-20 11:13 AM

A very attractive work in progress, dear Rick!

Wow, how truly awesome that your Father was able to utter that most significant of words, as his last message for you.

Looking forward to the next phase!

Love,
Margherita

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