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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2008-07-08 09:35 PM


My questions are so different now--like,

"Who looks good in taffeta?"

Perhaps a gal built like a broom?

Or a thin man playing bride?

I suppress the urge to lick

my finger (cuticles are bit)

as I idle my engine

before I thumb advertisement

assaulted by the noxious fumes

of scented samples of the true

essence of womanity.

I smile to think in wonderment

if anyone has smelled the scent

of sweaty urgent loins of me

before they dropped a droplet of

whatever that smell just might be--

animal, or citrus juice?

No matter which, it ain't the truth.

I turn the page again and blue

eyes (descibed as "piercingly")

are vacant in their gaze at me.

"Once," I thought, "I had such eyes"

after I had spent the night

sobbing in my sleep...

My questions are so different now.

I don't care to know much more

if all we know's accounted for

then give me innocence.

I turn the page again.

"She looks good in taffeta."

I cocked my head and closed one eye.

"If yer inta layer cakes..."

I check my watch--the doctor's late--

hoping that's a sign that He

is tending to humanity

instead of wasting precious time

as I age there, anxiously,

comparing people to the gloss

images before me as

everyone

sighs audibly,

suppressing questions obvient:

"Who looks good in taffeta?"?

No, I don't believe that's it.

We want to know--

"Who's next?" and this -

"Am I even on the list?"

Angelina's loveliness

makes me feel inadequate,

and I suppress the urge to lick

my finger as I turn the page

hostage to obedient

vestiges of time.


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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2008-07-08 09:56 PM


I  hate waiting in Drs. offices or any other for that matter as if  my time is not as valuable...


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2 posted 2008-07-08 10:03 PM


You are priceless, K. How many times have I had similar Q's when thumbing through those anal women's magazines. No one looks good in taffeta....well, maybe Twiggy or Audrey Hepburn could have pulled it off.
hang in there gorgeous.

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2008-07-08 10:08 PM




One for each of you!

and "obvient"?

*chuckle*

My original title was not forum decorum.

Love you both...

and Kace? Oh..I'm HANGING...lawsy.

(expletive gravity!)

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4 posted 2008-07-08 10:13 PM


ummm, children look great in taffeta when playing dress-up ... and I love your poem.

Alison

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5 posted 2008-07-08 10:21 PM


ooooooooooh....

Alison? nodding, you should write that, dawlin'!

Thanks for reading me! A kiss for you too!


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6 posted 2008-07-08 10:26 PM


I was captivated by the brilliance of your beautiful mind woman!
Great title, amazing spill!
Angelina is so boring compared to you!

Keeping this one.

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2008-07-08 10:31 PM


*smile*

YOU--are lovely, m'friend.

I'm so happy to be here tonight, and thrilled if I can return the favor of the enjoyment of reading YOU.

(Sometimes I just sit here and sulk, and read, yanno.)

smile

Angel--I'm not. But I do enjoy you ever so much K.


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8 posted 2008-07-08 10:54 PM


Ouu!  I enjoyed reading your thoughts

Serenity!!!!



ARCTIC WIND

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9 posted 2008-07-08 10:56 PM


ive had those inside my own head conversations in the waiting rooms
between waiting to rinse and spit
a wealth of poetry sometimes writes itself in blooming colors

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2008-07-08 11:50 PM


A.W., Mish?

(hmmm)

awmish?

AMISH?

*chuckle*

thanks, both of you. and to A.W. and

to m'lovely!

thank you both, very much

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11 posted 2008-07-09 08:04 AM


If this is what you serve us while waiting for the doctor, I think there was definitely the positive side in those idle moments ...

Taffeta made me think of when - in the past - I had the patience to make a dress for my daughter. She used it perhaps twice, it must be hanging somewhere like a forgotten souvenir of other times. As a child she looked gorgeous in it, yes I agree with Alison here.

It's a pleasure to turn the pages with you ... a real treat!

Love,
Margherita

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12 posted 2008-07-09 08:44 AM


Time well spent in waiting if it produces charms like this, I enjoyed the read, great work Serenity.

p.s.

I used to look good in Taffeta, but now I feel that shot silk is the way to go.... but that's another story  

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13 posted 2008-07-09 11:21 AM


If I'm on time, they should be, as well.

But something always keeps me from
thumbing through thumbed, drummed pages
that are what, three years old, and the
news is not new anymore, and the people
in those pages have aged, and no one has
yet to explain that to them;

so I take my own books...or a pad of paper...
sometimes I think the pad of paper, and my
scribbling in it, gets me called into the
waiting room a little faster [heaven forbid,
she takes notes!]

but once out of sight, then out of mind...
but at least no one can now think that I'm
going to file a report for tardiness.







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14 posted 2008-07-09 11:51 AM


A delightful portrayal of the frustration of sitting in a waiting room.  I always enjoy wandering through your very vibrant mind.  Loved the "aging" while you were sitting there.  

Hope the doctor made you well after all that time he kept you waiting.  

I love Sunshine's idea of having pen and paper in such circumstances.

- Owl

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15 posted 2008-07-09 12:21 PM


g'mornin'!

And yep, I usually have my own pen, my own paper, and I don't touch their magazines.

Um. I'm a germophobe at the doctor's office.



I'm bad. I feel like I'm sitting in a leper colony when I'm there.



But thanks for reading, and my love to all!


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16 posted 2008-07-09 12:51 PM


see? How awesome...you are too cool Karen and the Angelina part..for sure
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17 posted 2008-07-10 02:08 PM


LOL...going to the Dr. in the morning...almost afraid of what I'll think when I start turning the pages...hmmm - definitely won't lick my finger after the first page....or then again, maybe I will...just think of all the people I'm "touching".
Loved it...

j.

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18 posted 2008-07-10 05:03 PM


good luck, j!

and it occurs to me I've written quite a few poems about ...waiting.



Thanks again, everybody! Ya'll are all lovely.

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19 posted 2008-07-11 02:34 AM


Not a moment wasted here,
                 Ida

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20 posted 2008-07-11 02:44 AM


I kinda think I look rather good in taffeta over the holidays K, a nice emerald     I absolutely never go to the doctor on time, neva!!  This was a good "fly on the wall poem."  Loved it lovey.
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21 posted 2008-07-31 01:44 PM


You should ask your doc to display it. It's way better than anything a person can find in mags anyway.
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22 posted 2008-09-17 07:18 AM


Aye, you were right - we must have been separated at birth lol

I was in the doctor's office last week, looked at a magazine, which I almost NEVER do, and saw a model in some outfit and I thought..... who could wear THAT? It didn't even look good on her.

I get to go back to a different doctor next week. They have no magazines with models. They are all Neurology Monthly or something lol - and I keep hand sanitizer in my purse.

Ohhhhh I SO love your writing. It talks to me like it has known me all my life

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23 posted 2008-09-17 10:33 AM


Friggin' Fabulous.
serenity blaze
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24 posted 2008-09-17 01:32 PM


grinnin' @ icequeen...

Neurology Monthly sounds like you should have feminine products sticking out your ears!

(It's okay folks, she and I "get" each other's sense of humor!)

Thanks for reading and replying too, viking.

I keep hoping to come up with something new, folks, but when you don't know where it ends, it's kinda hard to start.


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